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Kiri of the Vineyards

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full-bodied notes fade to erruptive applause, and she

beautiful diva, embraces all with widening brown eyes

 

'bravo!' 'bravo!' they cry to themselves and the sky

her passionate face, her warm liquid voice, a rare vintage

 

echoes of songs flow rippling forever once the cellar door's

shut! last tail-light slips by far field, last vine with stars left

 

only to shine, and no one would think that one thing she feels -

a slow saboteur creep upon her shoulder of years

 

clasped hand at the heart, chill

fog in the lungs ... cold clutch at the throat 

 

but memories spring alive, always, on this focus of song -
this radiant lady, with aristocrat style, distinctive and

 

fine - in lyrical elegance poured from her heart 

deep within a carafe of red wine, and thousands

 

intoxicated, sit mute and thirsty for more .... 

 

 

 

 

 

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15 lines or fewer, free verse, without end-line rhyming, creative, full of personal meaning, poetic devices, and show and not tell ...contest prompt. Dame Kiri Te Kanawa sang in vineyards and Outback venues.

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 28, 2008
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    Now, why would they not cry "BravA"?

    The "slow saboteur..." metaphor is a corker.


  • Dienush
    July 12, 2008

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    I really like where you took the prompt. The imagery here is very vivid. I especially enjoyed the second stanza and the second to last line. Nice work. Thank you for entering my contest

    ~Diana


  • myrataal silver member
    June 24, 2008

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    She is EXCELLENT!

    And so is your verse of dedication. Isn't the voice touched by perfection and enhanced by lyrics and composition and orchestra not SIMPLY DI-VINE?

    Her name, Kiri, always makes me think of a little birdie in its auditive soft sound. She is simply great.

    Thank you for YOUR voice too, and for YOUR wondrous Hymn to Mary.

    Love
    Myra


    • Lyndon gold member
      July 13, 2008
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      My voice is like an old teapot:

      Evidence of use but cracked.


  • leo2
    June 22, 2008

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    I know not the person you have written about here but she must have touched your soul with her voice. This eloquent tribute is worthy of the gold.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • Lyndon gold member
      July 13, 2008
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      Outside of USA

      That is, the rest of the civilized world, Dame Kiri Te Kanawa is one of the World's more famous Opera Singers. She still sings and was the soloist at Prince Charles & Lady Diana's wedding. That she hails from New Zealand would explain why Americans do not know her but U.K. and Europe do as well as S.A. and Australia.

  • Vera Rich gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Interesting and evocative... but, as you probably have gathered, I never make detailed comments on a poem entered for a competition which is still open.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    What a beautiful tribute. The comparison of your diva to fine wine is so rich and wonderfully executed throughout. I do not know her, yet you have made me connect with the feeling of hearing her voice, and consequently with the creeping, clasping and clutching (beautiful consonance, by the way). I find this to be completely lovely and it makes me wish to hear the music in someplace beyond my imagination. Wonderfully done.


  • MargaretG
    June 21, 2008

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    wonderful imagery

    I like the metaphor of the soprano's voice as red wine poured out of her heart. There is richness in the connotations, as well as the detail of stars on the vine. It is a fine thing when an artist such as Dame Kiri is honoured and appreciated in her lifetime.

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