The waters flow, and softly flow away,
clouds and rain, streams and fountains,
rivers, lakes, canals and oceans;
and life, with love like water in a way,
has wet and dry faces like a mountain,
of green and rocky places of emotion.
Where is that eternal spring which feeds
the heart with love which never fails?
The saints show it is not an idle notion;
for year by year, they give for others' needs
in shelters, hospitals and jails.
Their payment is intangible devotion.
We are not saints and not required to be,
but all desire to rest, and live in peace.
Where is the end to our commotion?
The waters chuckle liquid harmony,
they flow now and without cease -
my friend, let us study love in motion.
What do you think?
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This is wonderful, Margaret - I like the rhythm and the tricky thing you have done with the every third line end rhyme that makes it almost imperceptible. Lovely.
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Liked the flow of these lines, the rhythm and rhyme you have used to convey your feelings. What lovely images yo portray in the verses.
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uplifting, optimistic poetry.
I love it. You ask for my least favourite part ...I have problem with the repeat of the word FLOW in the first line. Otherwise, I think it is perfect.
I like the way each verse changes from the introduction of an idea in nature in verse 1, to the transposition to real life in verse 2; the question and the 'saints.' and the idea of the last, especially in the last line: 'let us study love in motion.' That is a wonderful thought.
I am not sure about the word 'cease' which is a verb, not a noun, but poet's have a licence!
I think it is a terrific poem, with a lot of food for thought, good metaphor and rhyme and unique in the way it portrays the theme.
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Thank you for your lovely comment and interesting thoughts, Richard. Of course, I like the way I wrote the poem, but you have justification for your complaints. I'm happy you enjoyed it, thank you for applause.
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Water and life go hand in hand and you have captured this so well with your words, your images are crystal clear and convey 'Love in Motion' well.
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem with us.
Sue
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Thank you for reading and applause, Sue.
Best wishes for a great summer!
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a sweet and soothing flow.. both Love in moton and this beautiful stream of love.
Be ever blessed and bright,
Rahad
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Dear Rahad, thank you for your visit; it is always a pleasure to see you. I hope all is well in the wide world.
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I so loved the way in which you write ...
nature into the souls of people and into feelings ... You are truly linked to love in motion, which for me is our Living Water, God!
Thank you for the peaceful flow of this poem. It quenched my thirst.
Love
Myra
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Thank you so much, Myra!
The only thing in life which gives it purpose, to me, is love found in relationships. There are many kinds of energy, but the expressions of love in attention and affection, appreciation and honour enliven whom they touch. I like your link with the Living Water. That is the Source for the saints, and for us.
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Beautiful. I intended to write a poem about midsummer, but this has stopped me in my tracks. Here, the clouds lower over us, no birds sing - a grey day to begin. But elsewhere, it is good to think of the peace which the world deserves. Thank you.
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Thanks Keith, though I did not intend to be your anti-muse, and I hope the sun can shine through the literal and figurative clouds. A cloud is only water, and has its purpose.
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