enter reluctant
never return again
find serene
A contest entry
- SURVIVAL HAIKU by Swan song.
650 points, ended June 23, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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good take thank you for your entry very good
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OH.....I missed reading your poems. I like to read a little bit of Ven in the mornings, it's more pleasing than the sweetest desserts.
As for your haiku, I admit I will have to give my brian some more time to process the meaning. "Enter reluctant," and "never return again," are perfectly clear, the last line has confused me.
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It is somber and useful to contemplate the end. We must hold on to life while we can, but then let it go with a restful sigh. I like this interpretation of the photo.
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Wonderful
Hi,
you have penned a very good Haiku here.. I love haikus as they say so much and dont have space for any unwanted words! Mostly my haikus are based on nature... so I've read this kind of a haiku for the first time. Its very meaningful and chaste. Although the 'aha' moment in the last line can be perfected more a little bit I think.
-Good luck in the contest.
Neha
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your haiku create the scenes of eternity and being in total peace forever a wonderful poem
enter reluctant never return again tasting serene
good luck in the contest
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