The Blade,
Sharp and Silver.
Slides across my Skin.
A Shining Star.
The Cut.
Shallow and Simple.
Just deep enough to reach.
Life
Seeping,
Slowly seeping comes,
the Red Carrier of Life.
I Sacrifice It Willingly.
Not deep enough to Kill.
Only Release is what I Seek.
The Pain, Dull yet Searing.
As Emotion pours out with this Seeping river.
It Drips from my Finger,
As I Stare into the Rain.
It seems like the Sky,
Sees my Pain.
The Evidence,
Hidden below.
Tears,
Washed away in the Flow.
Dear Little Blade,
We May Meet.
Once Again...
A contest entry
- Love,Depression,Sorrow, by XxunBeautifulxX.
300 points, ended June 24, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - on the dark side ... prewrites ok by b497.
300 points, ended June 25, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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just deep enough to reach life
that was good.
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ok...there are good things about this...you wrote about a cliched subject in a fresh way, I liked your blood metaphor and the personification of the blade.
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Very dark and that is what i was looking for thank you for entering
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Well...I like it. It's depressing, but it's very well written. The way the words work together is really good. Like I said...it makes me a little worried, but how could it not? You really did a good job in relating emotions.
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Why thank you
Thanks Twitch, yes it is depressing, but its just what came out... thank you for your input.
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