Desired Dance by Whoochi at All poetry

Dancing desire drips

from love parched lips

Distance

pierce through aching hearts

longing

to live as one

Entangled souls

crave to be close

to bathe in sensations, rhythmic

as only their bodies are aware

Learning

Engaging

not to weather the storm

only how to dance in the rain

Author notes

Meet me in chalet..we shall dance forever together!

A contest entry

Prewrite 1000 pt. Checklist by Ryno. 1000 points, ended July 18, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What About Love? by GypsyEyes. 500 points, ended July 30, 2008, 132 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Anything and everything by Fitz1901. 750 points, ended July 22, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Can you feel this, see this, ???

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soulfultia
April 8

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Excellent vision you give the reader! Loved the flow and pause going on. Excellent work girl! ~Tia
HeLovesMeNot
February 27
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This is excellent!!!!! No more needed to say. You know it's good!
poeticweaver
January 6

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Lovely!
Laura
December 10, 2008
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this is brilliant stuff wow ive missed reading your poems xxxx
jazzcat
October 25, 2008

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Wow. That's good. I love the ending. You fill this with a passionate feeling that speaks of sensual and exciting moments. I really like your word choices that enhance the image of the dance being more than just a "dance". Great job.
Everwind Rising
August 30, 2008
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Love this. Those last two stanzas are great.
GypsyEyes
July 22, 2008

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love the format and i think it is very powerful for such few lines. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
z etoile
June 26, 2008

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I really liked this poem a lot. THis well deep and full of emotion and truth. I liked the last lines

Engaging

not to weather the storm

only how to dance in the rain

Great job keep writing.
Desire
June 25, 2008
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Beauty Strolling~
Oh My Apple Pie wha a piece penned and in the rain~
much to gain...
Love the energy and the emotions with salsa swaying hips
A pretty picture~
Happy to see You back with that quill spilling ink
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
djfrombahston
June 24, 2008

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You are one of a kind!!
Only you can capture the true essense and emotions of 2 entangled souls. I know who those souls are and I am also blessed to know the # of the Chalet. Your style is sooo unique. The pauses...The 1 word descriptions that make you ponder!!! Wonderful job as usual sweetie. I love it!!!
You know who your "soft spot" is and I can feel the "Anticipation" of the next "Look" that you write about. There is one lucky person on this planet to be your "Strollmate", that's for certain. Please don't stop writing!!!
BTW.....YES
jacbgd2
June 21, 2008

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Magnificent!!!!!!! BRAVO!!!! BRAVO!!! BRAVO!!!! There no other writer quit like you!!
This is a master piece!!!!! Every word chosen is perfect! Every one flows perfectly with the other and the format only you could have chosen... It is unique just as it's writer is unique!!!! I expect no less from you, my fellow poet and my friend!!!!! Long time no hear from!!!!

I love this piece!!!!!!!!!!
thelordreigns
June 21, 2008
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It is wonderful to see you writing again. You have been missed. I pray all is well.

This is a very deep and sensual poem. If only we could learn how to "dance in the rain" our struggles and worries would fade away.

Beautifully written. I especially appreciate the placement of the lines on the page.....

Hugs and love to you always...

- joanne -
limechic
June 21, 2008
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i like this...you can interpret it in a sensual way...or a sexual one. but i think the main message is just the closeness. sometimes you desire to be with that one person; whether it's physically, emotionally, or sexually. i love the words youve chosen...aching, longing, crave.

creates a beautiful picture =) great work!
Amera
June 21, 2008

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Glad you're back, I missed you more than you may think. I like this poem, you haven't lost any of your creative skills. Motion in passion, that's what it's all about. Well done!

Love,
Amera♥
sheltered
June 21, 2008

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Haven't seen you around in a while.
Nice to see and read you again.
I like the end metaphor here
It describes my own thoughts well
I try to stay clear of the storm
Does dancing in the rain get you wet?
Rovingone
June 21, 2008
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I can't seperate the words I like best in this one, it's all too good.
Cerulean Sunrise
June 21, 2008

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In the rain
not only surviving
but truly living

This was wonderful, my watermelon starburst.
teebs
June 21, 2008

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I love the idea of dancing in the rain: so romantic. The last two lines are my favourite, good job
Endeavor
June 21, 2008
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Excellent
Distance
pierce through aching hearts
longing
to live as one
Entangled souls
crave to be close

I like the form in which you write
Wonderfull words of yearning

Rick
Blueskywonder
June 21, 2008

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Such a passionate piece full of rythmic devotion depicting a dance of pleasure in the cleansing feel of rain no force just mingling motion like bliss set sail on love's cool ocean. Beautiful write! Very well done my sensual friend! I hope all is well and things are good for you
By the way what number chalet, i could do with learning a few new steps Great write!