Your lips parted
scarring me deeper
than silence can heal...
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Prompt: Sharp
A contest entry
- Quickie...Three lines...Sharp by Luna Tique Fringe.
525 points, ended June 21, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Creative approach on the prompt, I like it. And I also like how silence can't heal what's been done -- it's as if the empty space of silence needs to be filled with whatever happened after the kiss. :-) which makes me happy. But while reading this I also thought about how people are piercing their tongues these days so they are actually forked. I don't know if you had this in mind while writing this, but it definitely gives it a different level of meaning! Wowsers.
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very nice take on the prompt . . well done !!
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I like this - the scars from words/lies that even silence can't heal. I do believe in the realm of silence, that being where the mind works, but then healing comes with talking to silence those scarring words.
Marlene -
three lines written with such a sharpness and deep thought.they have a sadness within them and it really left my mind wandering as there was so much imaged and said within this piece even though it was only 3 lines long. a powerful write well done mum
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Three lines was all that was needed here! Well done to you. Juls
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Oh wow.....three lines of intense emotions. Very well done.
I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel -
so sharp it's deep..
or so deep... it's sharp. hmmm.. love it!
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oh wow. i like the imagery in this one
"scarring me deeper
than silence can heal"
man, that brings about so many different images. great job!
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like a razor !
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