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Thinking Of You (acrostic)

Thankful for the many times you
Have given me
Insight, even though I was
Not aware of the
Knowledge dwelling
Inside your words.
Not a moment
Goes by without a recollection

Of the neverending
Faith that you've invested in all the

Years I have known you.
Over and over, my mind struggles to
Understand why you still care

Author notes

For my mother. I wrote this while i was in jail.

A contest entry

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 24, 2008
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    I am sure that your mother truly appreciated this.


  • Shassidy
    July 5, 2008

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    This is a great piece! Honestly, I don't usually like acrostics, but this one was done with great flow and it works really well. Most acrostics are choppy phrases all put together, but this piece flows all the way through, which is really great. Also, I'm glad you put the author's notes in, that made the poem a lot stronger. I'd have to say my favorite part is the last two lines because they are really powerful and are great closing lines. As far as the title goes, although it reflects the ideas of the poem well, it's clichéd. I would work with the title a bit to figure out something more inventive and unique, but that's my only suggestion for this piece. Overall, great job and good luck in the contest!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 28, 2008
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    A delightful acrostic and a great celebration of motherhood, thank-you for the entry.

  • Judith Chandler
    June 25, 2008

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    "my mind struggles to/Understand why you still care" I have wondered this about my parents and how they feel/felt about me. Sometimes it didn't seem there was any way to connect but things have improved over the years.

    I like what you did with your acrostic.

  • hose30
    June 21, 2008

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    This was really good acrostic. I really enjoyed it. Your words were soothing and your heart was evident.I think that she would like this. great again.

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