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Shards Of A Goodbye

Shards of memories,
Now crush against your ocean of lies,
no valor to slice the tragedy...

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Tried my best!
XXVampireeyesXX

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  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 20, 2008

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    I would suggest an edit...

    shards of memories,
    crush against a sea of lies,
    no valor to slice away the tragedy

    this gives it more punch..and adds to the alliteration and sibilance