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inserted needles

Invasion of your soul
Needles slowly sinking in
Agonizing screams; death

A contest entry

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  • SuicidalLover
    June 21, 2008

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    Whoah...are you talking about the NEEDLE ... like for prison? *O.O* Very edgy. A great take on the prompt dear. Wonderful. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel


  • crimsondew
    June 21, 2008
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    OUOCH! hurts..well done dear..
    All the best ...many


  • brightXdarkness
    June 21, 2008
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    Oh wow. This is intense. But I like it a lot for the reasoning of its intensity. Very good. And I absolutely love how it ends with "agonizing screams; death." it made me feel kind of sick while reading this honestly... but that's what makes it such great poetry in the fact that I could almost feel it going on! Great job and keep on writing!!

    Alex

  • memorymaker
    June 20, 2008
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    OUCH! VERY GOOD DESCRIPTIONS OF PAIN,BEST OF LUCK IN THIS CONTEST


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 20, 2008
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    yikes...violent

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