Breathing halted, life surrendered
Epidermic invasion, conquered with sharp evidence
Flowing - essence drains, depleting
Author notes
Prompt: Sharp
A contest entry
- Quickie...Three lines...Sharp by Luna Tique Fringe.
525 points, ended June 21, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"breathing haterd"
That took my attention from the beginning and RAN with it. Short and to the point. Beautiful work. I like how you can slam so much emotion in to such few words. Great work here Chris.
Warmest,
Mylee -
...essence drains....
i'm speechless...wonderful expression!
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Loved it...Dark and leaves an impact
Best of Luck!
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Excellent dark write....All the best!
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Oooo....very dark....I like it! A great job done here.
I wish you luck! 
~Kystal angel -
well done - I can feel the imagery within as I read this, well done and many blessings always xx
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i like this
love you -
can i change it or not?
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yes, you can, if you wish
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"conquered with sharp evidence" ... I like that
I don't like 'crimson' ...if I had a nickle for everytime I read that word...I could fly to Spain tomorrow.
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