You are the mother of seduction
The procreator of destruction
Rejecter of laws from above
Yet, you were designed for love
I wonder if the snake was at the root
Of the tree with the forbidden fruit
The tree planted in the earth’s crust
Bearing sins which included lust
You are tainted by demons of forged laws
Is the Eve of destruction a hopeless cause?
The redeemed are the only ones exempted
From the punishment for being tempted
The new Eve has given birth to the Christ
To pay for our sins He has been sacrificed
To die to ones self is the spirits reduction
We must not give in to the Eve of destruction
Author notes
option 2 This was inspired by my soon to be ex-wife
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very deep and meaningful imagery here, very intense!
This reminds me a little bit of a song, but can't figure out which one...
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BRAVO!
This is very very well done. I feel it deep inside. This one has left me quite in awe. I'm sorry that i do not have much to say. This is just simply amazing.
You've got great structure. Wonderful flow..
The Rhyming was to die for
Not to mention your word choice.
"Rejecter of laws from above
Yet, you were designed for love"
Very beautiful.
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