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Masquerade of Being Alive

Tinted soul
defined by broken shadows
shimmering mixtures of feelings
embracing frozen breath
beneath silhouttes mists

Soul nudity swaying
over burning frustrations
weaving strings of dreams
of lively tunes
beautiful life palette painted
out of rainbows particles
forging into hues with different
brush-strokes of imaginations

Such beautiful facade of
relinguishing pains
and shattered hopes
crafted in sugar coated smiles
and dandelions scents

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http://darkartists-inc.deviantart.com/art/The-masquerade-of-being-alive-84332277

60 words

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  • xeroabyss II
    June 23

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    All of life is a painted picture, and sometimes we have no choice what colors are used to create the scenes of our existance, yet often we find ways to smear the paint and obscure all but a few of the thousand words expressed within.
    And sometimes, we shred the canvas, in hopes to completely destroy it.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 9

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    Excellent write for the picture. I can realte to this poem well as I think many others can as well. We all hide some or our pian beneathe a facade. Love that last stanza. Thank you for your entry
    Gaylene


  • PatheticKt
    August 25, 2008

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    Hello. Beautiful take on this great piece from the picture prompt, all right
    My mind's telling me that something's wrong here but I have no idea on what to critique here Love the words written here describing the picture beautifully in its surrealism . . .
    . . . ok, I found what I can critique, haha; I think you should've added more lines to this because the theme is just describing the pic- think outside the box
    Anyway, wonderful piece you got here, indeed


  • daviscth silver member
    July 14, 2008

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    A wonderful use of your word limit. The imagery is awesome. I realy liked the ending lines. Thanks for posting in my contest.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 10, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. I love the metaphors and imagery in this piece. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • DogFish silver member
    July 9, 2008
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    harsh !




  • peridotPixi
    July 8, 2008

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    Thank you for the beautiful entry to my contest,
    I really love your take on the prompt I love the feelings you have took from this picture along with the darkness I see and feel when I look at it and you describe it so well, I like the last part the best how the shattered hopes are crafted in sugar coated smiles and dandelion scents very creative, maybe if you added a background you would add more depth to this wonderful poem, as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~ Amy


  • Swan song gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    This is really very very good As you always are.
    You have an elegence about your poetry that is a rare wine to say the least.


  • KayJay
    June 21, 2008
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    Vivid images and flowing prose... Well done and deserving of recognition...
    Ken


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Lovely imagery in this, and showing so well how we do hide those pains under a sugar coated facade!
    Those broken shadows and frustrations can be hard to deal with..
    Excellent write!!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Wow, stunning imagery. I love the last couple of lines...really pulls the piece together. Beautifully penned, good luck

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