When I was down you lifted me up
When I was in need you were there
When I just wanted to talk you talked
When I cried you made me laugh
When all is said and done
You are my savior
When death seemed a reprieve
You became my knight
you reminded me of joy
You the one who accepted me
When I thought I could never love
You reminded me how much love I have
you swept me off my feet
Wrapped me in your arms
Reminding me of who I am
And for this I owe you the world....
A contest entry
- when... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended July 4, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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wow
i loved this one.....it sweep me away and brought back so many fond memories for me of my first love....thank you for shareing
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Ah..the words are very touching representing the truth of your heart..well done..my thanks for such a wise entry in my contest...
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great last line - there has to be a dramatic conclusion to a piece like this - there has to be a good end, because with the best will in the world what goes before is not uncommon to find in poetry - so a good ending on piece like this is the authors chance to stamp their own identity on the piece.
It is positive - and on this particularly Saturday morning I feel in the mood for uplifting positive writing.
Well done.
James
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