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Marion

Missing image

Her heart 
had once been warmed  
with silk sheets 
and kisses

that left

only his sweet nectar

to tickle her cheeks  


 
Her soul

now numb;

trapped in a cold front
that blew through

the open door

where she now carries frost bit desires

hues of passions
hibernate
somewhere between
her once bright eyes
and the silver sky

 

penatrating virgin snow

with each step

she knows  

he holds hostage

the honey to her

hollow heart

and all the sparkle

of her soul

 

as she, lightly, drifts among bare, bony trees

searching

for her lost lover

or for the rest of her being

 

Author notes

Pic credit : http://i285.photobucket.com/albums/ll71/artchwat/snow_bench_tree_trinity_park.jpg

Option 2 - LONELY
trying to do a contrast on winter and spring with heartbreak and love ...

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  • wow realy stong words i liked it ^_^
    good luck


  • Mila7
    July 3

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    Great poem! I have to say I love the following verses, it has great power.

    "with each step

    she knows

    he holds hostage

    the honey to her

    hollow heart "

  • teddybare
    June 25

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    emotional dynamite

    oh to love and have lost .. lol no but 4 serious this is a great write good luck in the contest


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 21

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    Searching among bare bony trees for her lost lover and the for the rest of her being. How dramatic and powerful. It was a perfect ending to a deeply meaning filled poem.

    . Rewarded 4

  • pruedence
    June 21

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    Lonely, is what I felt with your words. A lost lover, leaving you behind with on going loving feelings and no where for them to go. Beautiful words, thanks for sharing

  • DeGraw
    June 21

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    Stark

    The verse matches the picture so well. A well thoughtout write. the only problem I had was seeing the font on the background maybe you could change it to a different color? good luck!
    Regards, Jennifer

    . Rewarded 4


  • DeGraw
    June 21
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    Stark

  • Good write. I can somehow relate to this. Thank you for entering and good luck!

    ~Ookami~
  • Some nice imagery here, and not too over the top - good work.
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