i am laid once again on the cold surface
as she drums her fingers upon her chin
that longing in her eyes wants to say something
but she can't find where to begin
i being her trusted messanger
between her heart, mind and paper
she's let go of all things she regrets
but the thoughts just won't escape her
i am lifted from my resting place
her grip firm and tight
as tears begin to appear in her eyes
she and i begin to write
she speaks of heart ache and remorse
as she explains her state
it rains tears of sorrow upon my cap
as she painfully remembers that date
she refuses to return to the pain
and her clenched fist tells me
it's her last thing on her to-do list
before she can accept her true beauty
i am thrown to the wooden surface
as she signs her name in my black ink
her head hits the table as sobs overcome
and she lets go as she adds the final link
Author notes
well, i tried to write in the perspective of a pen...and this is like the girl is trying to let go of something she hasn't been able to, which is sorta what i'm going through. hope you like.
**EDIT**
i changed the last two stanzas a little bit...they seem to fit better. enjoy.
A contest entry
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950 points, ended September 10, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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This is really a peice of art and I love it! Great imagery and passion. My only advice is to just tweak the last two stanzas a bit but other than that this was great. ..i am adding you to the finalist list but if you tweak it then please let me know so i can take another look
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edited
i edited the last two stanzas so they fit better. thank you =]
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