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Dew Mourning

Happy thoughts,
how often they elude the weary.

Little bits of hope that captivate,
dime sized delights.

I’d ache for them I’m sure,
if I could bear it.

But age thwarted illusions long ago
and I’m jaded.

Though often at sunrise, I smile
glimpsing a passer-by.

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  • Roaddog Wolf gold member
    July 4

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    your words strike very close to home here, "happy thoughts, how often they elude the weary."
    "but age thwarted illusions long ago and I'm jaded." I so can identify with these thoughts. I have been pondering these very realities myself here these days, ..... I believe I have come to the same conclusions, good write!

    Thank you for entering and good luck in the judging


  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 24

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    Reflections of a heart and soul that is weary..with no illusions of life as it is, realities take over...Short lines, but to the point.As often you do not labour alot with your writes.. It seems to flow from your pen naturally! Very good write!

  • individuality gold member
    June 24

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    Happy thoughts,
    how often they elude the weary.

    i can so relate her g - to the nadness and th sorrow i live in, i smile for those delightss. ah wat tf is tiome anyway>


  • Frozentearz gold member
    June 22

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    I also got lost in the line. "I’d ache for them I’m sure,
    if I could bear it." I think for me it is because sometimes we don't allow ourselfs to ache.
    Another fine wrie from your mighty pen.
    Blessings.
    Frozentearz

  • catie052 gold member
    June 20

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    wow...I really like this. Loved the last stanza and your play on the word "mourning" ..."Little bits of hope captivate; dime size delights; I'd ache for them im sure; if i could bear it" LOVED that line also ..dunno why, i just do...lol. enjoyable read!


  • Hekate gold member
    June 20

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    It's amazing how much hope can come from looking at the sunrise.
    This is really nice. Though it's personal I understand where you're coming from with it.

    Kari


  • Shadow Darkstar silver member
    June 20

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    Hm. I'm honestly, not qiuite sure what to make of this one. You're poems are usually so shor, so I can't always grasp the idea, unless I'm told it flat out. I'll try to work on it, but if it's any consolation, Vocabulary is always nice in your poems.
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