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The Hands of Man

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I used to listen, intensely, 
as I walked through tunnels of trees,
straining to hear leaves breathe
and birds sing
casual harmonies

oblivious to future fires
that will cackle with thunder
and blow the ashes of warnings
while lava crawls
undoing the hands of man











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***credit pic: Evolution_by_alyn
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I do mean "cackle" and NOT "crackle" with thunder. as an sort of an evil laugh

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  • Truetome
    July 19, 2008
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    very well done Catie ... says so much! and lovely worded. Love, truetome


  • Chrysalis
    June 22, 2008

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    oh the shining bright gold trophy! excellent job with this piece. Seems to me that you deserve it very much. I loved the 3rd and 4th line... such beauty expressed there, it felt very peaceful. I felt that the birds were really singing such harmonies. Very beautiful imagery... it dripped so much of this.
    Have a blessed day. (and thanks so much for your comment)
    -Blanche


  • ThunderMontage
    June 21, 2008
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    WOWSER'S XD

    Nice Work!!! The words are gorgeous!

  • pruedence
    June 21, 2008

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    The gold! That is wonderful! Great words in such a short poem, lovely, well done, thanks for sharing


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    The words to this are beautiful
    as I walked through tunnels of trees
    straining to hear leaves breath.

    What fantastic imagery.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    WOW! This is a most terse and powerful penning my dear, it speaks volumes, and well deserving of gold.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • sailor ptolema
    June 20, 2008
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    yay! congrats on gold!


  • poppa
    June 20, 2008
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    Congratulations on your gold.......well deserved..


  • Weltt
    June 20, 2008

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    Oh wow!! this left me a little speechless....that's all I got right now. thank you so much for entering!


    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      June 21, 2008
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      oh wow...I can't believe I won thank you for the gold...very much appreciated


  • sailor ptolema
    June 20, 2008

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    great piece!!!
    love it!!!
    best of luck in the contest!!!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    This is a great piece that you have penned here I wish you much luck in the contest


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    June 20, 2008
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    Great imagery here.




    Good luck

  • poppa
    June 20, 2008

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    Lovely write.....love the contrast between the 2 stanzas, really creates impact. and mother nature cant kill us quick enough


  • poppa
    June 20, 2008
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    Good luck to you

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