culled flesh falls away from bone
as time ravages like cyclone
moving fairest of face to crone
for never does death disown
while one moves to grave as drone
often times never having flown
instead being to fears prone
lacking contentment to own
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Quickie time!!! by Weltt.
550 points, ended June 20, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lol - SO MUCH RHYMING!!!
(methinks THAT'S the miserable part
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just kidding!
lovely dark take and deserving too!
congrats on the silver
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Your rhyme was flawless here. Usually this piece tend to sound a bit forced but not with your genius behind the wheel. This was rockin' Loved it!
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This makes me feel sad but maybe it is just me it is a good piece though goodluck love you always
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Oh it's a VERY sad poem. heh
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I don't believe it was a miserable mono rhyme at all. Actually, I believe it was one of your best rhymes you've done!
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hehe It's not miserable itself.
Thank you.
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def rhymes! This is good...i especially liked the first line...flows nicely, i think because of the alliteration. and the poem, as a whole, fits nicely together...this is good
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well done bro you never cease to amaze me with the wonders of you. The pic was cool and you helped bring it to life xx superb many blessings always and best wishes xxxx
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cool! I dig it
great take on the pic..I chose the same one!
best of luck in the contest!
*clappy
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I really liked this.. You did such a wonderful job.. The flow and rhyme was great! you really went into the prompt with this write!! best of luck!
Angel
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Wonderful write ....loving the rhythym and rhyme ...good luck
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Good luck!
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Thank you.
You gonna be in this? -
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I'm not sure
my muse is dead..
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Sorry to hear that.
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