Tongues slithered hopes
promising between lines of forever and always;
as your ring was solid proof
only liquidating beneath my skin.
Existence of doors never occurred
in closed minds keeping to narcissism
you look to mirrors in belief
that you're your only soul mate;
I lie forgotten on smothered grounds
as you stare blankly,
your bleeding dirt
is not here.
Author notes
30-60words
4)"Dont Try To Deny Me"
A contest entry
- Quickie time!!! by Weltt.
550 points, ended June 20, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations on your well earned trophy.There is a lot of depth in this write, Ros
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hey sweetie this is beautifully written you are quitte talented though not a dot-poem
it is quite the piece of writiing indeed! This had succh starkly beautiful images in all its sadness. I don't think there is a single correction/suggestion I could make fo this one! Congrats on the shiney 
hug*'s dad
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Excellent!
Love the essense of mystery in this poem! Very well delivered with the best of imagery and emotion. Don
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Wonderful write Steph...congrats on your trophy
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terrific!! brilliant imagery and phrasing. The flow worked well and the emotion ran deep. well penned!
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wow...a lot of great imagery. and a great read!!! good luck to you
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This is really really good!
I love the ending
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This is amazing darling very good write I am proud of you always wishing you much luck in this contest precious
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gorgeous!
love the imagery ♥
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still great with the edits
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You did a really good job hun.. I reallyl ike where you went with the prompt.. Bravo!! best of luck!!
*hugs*
Angel
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cool luna!
great write!
excellent flow, & delightful diction!
best of luck in the contest dear
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aww sorry, wasn't done. i had to edit it..had too many words
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Good luck!
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Good luck!!!
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