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do you feel the same?

 

Nightly, I envision your embrace.
[Oh, how could I not?]
I only want you to need me, like I do you.

Do you not feel the same and weep when I do?
Having bulimic eyes, I watch teardrops

vomit from my eyelids.
Hold me, that's all I desire.

And may I be closer,

so your presence lingers.

Have I ever told you
that I can't live without you?
That I cry for you at night,

just waiting for your touch.

Do you feel the same
or am I just crazy?

 

 

Author notes

Option - 10. Do you not weep, knowing that at night I cry to just be in your arms?

1. How long have you been on AllPoetry? since March of this year
2. What inspired you to use your username/ how was it chosen? I wanted something creative sounding/unique and I thought of Lowercase Prelude and that it sounded unique, so I chose it. I had a couple of other names before this one, but I've chosen to stick with this one
3. How often are you on AllPoetry generally? more than once a day. AP is kinda like my drug of choice. lol
4. Would you be willing to commit to a poem a week contest? yea. i'll try my best
5. Tell me some interesting/unknown things about you. i can sing and sing well, i love to help ppl, and i've written/published a book
6. What is your real name, so I can address you personally (if you prefer not to say, nicknames are fine)? my real name is Chris
7. Is there anything I should know? not that I can think of. i am always willing to talk. so if ya ever need someone to talk to, my "door" is always open.

Lowercase Prelude
"Is it too late for a love song?"

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Comments

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  • chasing rainbows
    September 29, 2008
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    this is really good, I like it a lot

    Peace & love,
    xx sin


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    Wait, what my friend?! Awesome piece!


  • movedon
    July 24, 2008

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    I defenitely know how you feel with this one! I feel like this about my fiance and the funny thing is he feels this way about me...we just constantly question it. The line about your eyes vomiting up tears..GENIUS!!! Such a great job here.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • sensualbutterfly
    July 22, 2008

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    WOW! Ok the line "having bulimic eyes watching teardrops vomit from your eyelids"... that really threw me. Kind of distrubed me. But a great write inspite. Thank you for your entry


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    Great piece. I liked the lines "Hold me, that's all I desire
    Closer, so your presence lingers" I don't know why...i just do...lol

  • ichigosama
    July 13, 2008

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    ichigosama

    it's a very moving, touching, and rhetorical questioning poem. it's beautiful and well written. what inspired you to write this? whatever or whoever you chose, good choice! thanks for entering!!!!


  • HiddenByTheDark
    July 8, 2008

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    very good and powerful poem.. It's such an amazing piece.. good luck im the contest

    ♥always Kate

  • CrystalRae2
    July 8, 2008

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    wow very good poem I love it and can relate I think a lot of people can good luck with the contest


  • GypsyEyes
    July 3, 2008

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    oh wow i've asked myself that many many times! great poem! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • StarOfDreams23
    June 27, 2008
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    I REALLY like this!


  • FindingMeInJesus
    June 26, 2008
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    Love the descrption. bulimic eyes... Very interesting and yet suiting. Wonderful job


  • enitsirhC
    June 22, 2008

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    "Having bulimic eyes, watching teardrops vomit from your eyelids"
    ^^^This is absolutely beautiful!

    You have a wonderful talent!
    Keep writing, and keep up the good work!

    Congratulations on winning gold in your contest!



  • Lotus-Mama
    June 21, 2008

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    What a feeling....something deep inside each of us. Beautifully intimate!


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 20, 2008
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    thank you for the comments, everyone.


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    June 20, 2008
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    Very beautiful write...
    I look forward to more from you..
    Many blessings
    ~A~


  • Mistress Masquerade
    June 20, 2008

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    You're imagery is just jaw dropping and the way it flows is beautiful. I must sy the last two lines (as well as your Author Notes) were my favorte though. I sing as well, but maybe not as well as you do. =)


  • Number 13
    June 20, 2008

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    I agree with Lipslikemorphine [which is a great song, btw.]

    Love the imagery ♥

    Good luck in the contest!


  • ShelbieSchizo
    June 20, 2008

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    So yea this is really really fantastic.
    I love the "bulimic eyes" part, its really amazing.
    Good luck in the contest!
    ♥

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