Boo! Daddy pulls funny faces
Tickle! Dad making me squirm
Now his eyes...
Reflecting such pain
No, please, not mum!
Author notes
Sorry that it is sad, my writing often reflects my emotions. Is the meaning lost to people? I had a tight word limit.
A contest entry
- Quickie Prompt by lowercase prelude.
600 points, ended June 20, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a very nicely writen piece with an open end for speculation. Great job and good luck in your contest.
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I dont think it reminds me of abuse it reminds me of a child that does not get to see a parent enough and wants his or her daddy goodluck in the contest much love
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i have read this again, and can now see that it could be interperated in several ways. While writing, I followed my emotional nose which was too close to the subject.
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My dark mind thought of something more sinister. But I don't know whether it is correct or not. Thinking along the lines of child abuse here. I could be completely wrong, but this could be taken as a very dark piece indeed. If it is, it is horrifyingly good. {Not the abuse, the write].
Wayne Leon
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Sorry
It was meant someones experience of a father. Daddy playing peek-a-boo, tickling etc (clowning about)
Then the last part is serious, his eyes filled with pain as he tells them about losing their mum.... Well thats what I meant my it, sorry it did not come across. Once you have judged, you can see who wrote each entry. -
I am actual confused as to what this write is supposed to mean.
Just the way you worded it, makes it sorta difficult to understand. at least for me
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