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It's Friday and she isn't dead Yet

 

 

the chimneys in Manchester spit fiery plumes

to the passer-bys, the Mancs, the Kosovans,

Czechs, Droylsden idiots, scallies, dealers, drunks

and stealing-the-tops off                  milk-bottle-kids.

 

it's a long list of die-hards

in the wool of lambs, slaughtered on a regular basis

on Friday nights through to Sunday               before the bells peel

10 to go, to their various places

of worship and abundant hips and lip service

then there are 10 of her fingers

typing this dirge

 

hoping
that the shouting and screaming

in her    bones

quietens

to a faint rub of saw and vehemence

that violates her own tongue

her growl returns

& fire in her groins becomes so hot

 

that the next man?


 

if ever

 

there may

be

 

                         one...

 

&                          ever be there

 

will burst into fucking flames

at her touch

and the die-hards will cheer

the Kosovan hookers will parade up & down Silverdale street

wearing nothing

 

 

but

her                          smile

 

 

 

 




 

 

 

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It's Friday and I am not Dead yet

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  • Esmereldatitswallop
    July 11, 2008

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    Wow, that was amazing! Loved the last line "wearing nothing but her smile" - brilliant! Good luck in teh contest xx


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    The sin of wrath
    Anger... such a normal, and dare I say necessary part of emotion, yet so many of us are taught to shove it down, to eat it, and eat it and eat it, all in the name of grace .... it seems.

    Odd, don't you think that only love, is considered proper in passion?

    I love those last lines... lol yes, there is a certain strength in revenge when wronged, it's why murder IS such a popular thing, I think..



  • Grunts Girl gold member
    June 22, 2008
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    love can be so like chemo hitting deep in the bones to seep out when you least expect it


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    "their various places
    of worship and abundant hips and lip service
    then there are 10 of her fingers
    typing this dirge"

    Be it dirge or hymnal, your words always, always ring true, Gill. I've been reading your words for 4 years now (although I was too intimidated by your gift to comment at first). Your writing continues to evolve & astound, dear Lady. Your stories are incredible, my Friend. I am so sorry you're sad, Scribe. It seems there's some sort of a sorrow virus going around these days. I have a large supply of tissues & broad shoulders to offer, should you require sustenance of that sort. Although I do not wear your shoes, I know the tracks of my own. Even in the dark, your words are luminous. Good luck in Liza's contest, Sweetie. Even more, I wish you sunny days filled with laughter...& moonlit nights overflowing with love...& a lil' lust for good measure. Wanda


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    June 21, 2008

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    WOOOOOOOHHHH!!!

    Where did that come from???

    I know... and it's GREAT!!!

    Sol


  • misselaineous
    June 21, 2008
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    this ...
    well
    you know...

    Elaine


  • DogFish silver member
    June 20, 2008
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    It's the end of the week and
    GADZOOKS!!!
    there's fire in your belly
    "Chilly"!


  • Cat gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    the title is a grabber
    the piece with the 10 fingers
    and the pain-
    not venom
    but pain
    is rivetting- your attention to detail excellent

    m


    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 21, 2008
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      i changed the venom part, you're right!!
      and thank you luv, so much


  • apples fell
    June 20, 2008

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    There is something so rhythmic and beautiful here. I already told you in an IM that I am refraining from critiquing your work at the moment...So, I'll just say here a bunch of lovelies. The first and last bit are so powerfully penned. When you write these darker pieces, I see so much. Some poetry needs to vent and the rest needs to sit on the back burner.

    I love you Gill.
    Stay well, alright?

    • NurseChilly gold member
      June 21, 2008
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      I am well luv, if anything thats the only thing that hasnt crumpled in all of this..

      the rest is strewn all over the house, bits of me, falling off everywhere, i think miss tilly-dog has run off with my heart and mind and buried them with her toys

      • apples fell
        June 21, 2008
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        I would applaud your comment back, but that would be like applauding your sadness and I don't want that.

        I know it feels awful now. Like parts of you are being taken for good. Hopefully these feelings will lift and Gillian will see the sun again, behind the poison clouds. Above the lark-less spring.

        In my thoughts. This will not change.

        Always .

        ;


  • Lucy.
    June 20, 2008

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    This is fabulous. I love your title
    And finishing it on 'smile', perfect.

    Love you X


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    "hoping
    that the shouting and screaming
    in her bones
    quietens"

    you are just amazing, you know, gilly... wonderful poetry...loved the intensity here, the way you write towards light and life

    i hear you, girl - and love you



    ~ Nicolette


  • Cannonsfire
    June 20, 2008

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    Not dead and not singing dirges in the dark to no one listening. I hear you Love, Chez

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