One day we are deeply in love with each other, and then we are in a fight whenever we do something it's just not right. Somethings not right, something is terribly wrong. When I see him, I just want to fall. I wish our dating had never come to an end I wish I wish I could call you my friend.
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nice
i like it. it speaks from the heart.
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I agree with greyhaime: it would work better if it was in stanza form, and that would make it easier to read.
Otherwise, yeah, it was pretty good! Although I can't believe you're 11 and you've already dated someone, lol. I'm still single myself! 
Have fun on AP!
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welcome to allpoetry
welcome to the site and thank you for sharing this with us.I think that you should maybe put it into more of a stanza than the paragraph but it is a good start to your writing. keep it up.
cheers
Grey
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