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Descombabulated

embed convictions inside my skull, if you weren't here to think for me
i think that i would be free instead i yearn to not live a dictated life
if you weren't here who would consume me from the inside out

ingesting me like the other ignorant slaves looking for more souls to save
all you need is a reason to destroy, if i visualize for myself it is heinous

bind me to your sacred cross you are angry because you have lost control
hysterical because i've ruined my soul abandoned my belief in you
producing anguishes is all you do, i'm not the one who's lost the way
i am not the one to attend to your scatterbrained preachings

i am no longer to kneel before you for now i pray to no one

 

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this is my version of the word...hope you like it!
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  • warrior-eagle
    July 6, 2008

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    I love the poem, the background, everything about this.
    Hah. yes, I liked it. I like what you did with my word It makes sense to me. Nice work.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    yeah. the text looks much better.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    July 4, 2008
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    Much hehe

  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    wow. full of powerful wording with a rebellious spirit. and like RedwingSpirit said, the print is quite tiny, you might want to enlarge it a bit.

    Very good piece though.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    July 4, 2008
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    I love it though hard to read in small print lol. Good luck with it sis.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 4, 2008

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    ooh wow i love this poem,
    its full of imagery and twisted little metaphors,
    your wording is just breath taking in this one,
    all my love, love y00uu hun,
    kitty xxx

  • warrior-eagle
    June 20, 2008
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    Descombabulated

    **See, I made that word up lol ... but one like that is in the dictionary..spelled like this:

    discombobulated

    DONT use the dictionary's word...use mine


    • GypsyEyes
      June 24, 2008
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      i really love how you made up that word...does it still have the same meaning as the dictionary one?

      • warrior-eagle
        June 24, 2008
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        my word means messy, confused, lost, not knowing what to do, desperate

        i forgot the dictionary one.

        I was just feeling like that and said i felt descombabulated lol

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