Stumbling through eddies
their eyes shaded with frowns
they forgot to notice:
laughter carressing raindrops
Author notes
Prompt ~ Some people walk in the rain, others just get wet. ~Roger Miller
15 words
A contest entry
- ~Monsoon~ by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended June 20, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You got me wet, what more do want?
congrats, its you, that should win a trophy all by itself god, your ego must be incomprehensibly gargantuan to the point of causing serious health problems. 
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shine that green and gold is underneath! this was a thought provoking write. It's almost a can't see the forest for the trees sort of thing
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I like the metaphor too in this. It is a very deep piece of writing that could be taken to mean a number of things. You have written this well and it has packed a punch Tatts. Well done on your trophy. Well done indeed.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
xx
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I think that this could be applied to several things. I love the deep metaphor in this piece. Very well done on your hm!
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very well crafted and sincere in meaning... x
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Awesome work.
I had to actually look up a word. That's pretty rare. lol
eddies
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~pushing chest out AGAIN~
thank you kind sir ... am glad that I could teach you a word today
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Interesting take on the given prompt;
but I think it is something that only you could think of..and that is what I would call you "forte'"
I love how you see the silver lining in things....BRAVO!
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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