A very suspicious look on its face,
hiding in the shadows without a trace.
Sneaking, creeping, here and there,
with a very intimidating, creepy stare.
Thats how some cats live their nine lives,
their eyes looking as sharp as knives.
But that is not what Harry does,
jumping in the pool is what he loves.
One day when I was inside my house,
you would think that he'd be chasing a mouse.
But into walls he was colliding,
and down the water slide he was sliding.
In the pool his time he was taking,
and when he got out, he was shaking.
I picked him up but did not walk far,
before I said "What a strange cat you are."
A contest entry
- Pet Poetry by Cynthia Gaines.
1200 points, ended July 1, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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i love this poem!!! it's awesome. Harry does sound kinda like a weird cat though...
-slick99
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We used to have a kitten named Shadow. He was black as you might imagine. The day we got him my grandaughter gave him a bath (he was covered in fleas and reeked of pot) after that whenever she went to take a shower he would jump right in! He was struck by a car poor thing. We really miss him.
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This is a wonderful rhyming quatrain. I'm impressed! This poem can also be classified as a chain Clerihew:
A Clerihew is a comic verse consisting of two couplets and a specific rhyming scheme, usually aabb. The poem is about/deals with a person/character within the first rhyme. Very good!
Love,
Amera♥
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Your cat sounds very silly to me, but I think most cats have funny ways. mine used to sit on top of a radiator, fall asleep and fall off, he never learned
This is a beautiful poem and your rhyming is outstanding, this was a joy to read.
Sue
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THANKS Rose of Ireland for the trophy
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Great job!!!
Wishing you the best of luck in this contest, and thank you for entering!!!
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This poem has great rhyming, and a cute story
Really made me laugh
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This is a great poem! I really liked the flow and detail in this. The story of Harry is really cute and it is a nice piece. A bit of the rhyming seems forced, like in lines 7 and 8, but overall it's good. Another pointer is that it helps to not start lines with "and" or "but" because it makes the line a bit choppy, but that's just a tip. Overall this is a really great poem with a light-hearted attitude in it and it's great. The title fits the poem and is not clichéd, but it could be a bit more inventive. In any case, great job and good luck in the contest!
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I love it!
Just reading the title, "My Odd Cat Harry" made me laugh.
The rhyme and flow, and word choice - everything about it - makes the first stanza my favorite. It is super! The last stanza is my next favorite - it's so funny! What a crazy cat! =) And I thought I got all the crazy animals.
Very fun poem - keep writing!
If you get a chance you might want to look at a poem I wrote, called "Afternoon In the Closet" - it also has a cat in it. =D
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aww that is so cute i have never seen a cat love water but i sure have herd it happens.... i have 15 plus cats running around my house 4 dogs and 2 goats, 1 duck and 5 horses so i love animals and hope you write more about yours because i love to read about love for animals and i also like to laugh so a poem like this is just what i am looking to read..... well keep up the good writing have fun....
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Very good write. It rhymes good but I doubt it flows (I'm not trying to be mean). This is just my opinion. But you are talented that you are age 11. Some people cannot write poetry at age 11 or younger or older. I love cats. I have 2 cats named Maggie and Smokey. I love Maggie and Smokey very much. Maggie and Smokey are my bundle of joy. They make me happy when I am down.
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This reminds me of my cat, Hallie. She always chases water whether it be rain or the water out of the hose! Very weird she is, but I love her to pieces! Very well done.
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omg hes adorable!
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Oh my gosh, your cat is SO CUTE!!!! Why can't my cat be that cute? Anyways, back to your poem: First, I think it's great that your cat is actually worth writing about, lol, and I love the stuff you talked about in it. You entertained me with your story, and with your humor. I like the last line, too. That made me laugh! Thanks for sharing, you did a great job with this! Luck to you in your contest!
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Cute pic! lol
The rhyming and the rythmn were perfect too.. that was nicely written.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Rather cute and sweet, I like the imagery of the cat doing these silly things
Wonderful write
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