Mornings cold and frosty
Now that winter has arrived.
It'll be my birthday soon,
Another year survived.
Right now the rain is falling,
Soft and gentle soaking rain
Falls like leaves upon a pathway,
Gets together
Puddles drain.
Dry crisp grass from summer
Has new green underneath
Soaking,wetting rain brings
New life beyond belief.
The garden's almost empty now
Much bare ground can be seen
Getting ready for the planting
Welcoming the spring.
A contest entry
- Rain. Rain. Rain. by rosie4491.
450 points, ended August 7, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Random options. by Shrat.
600 points, ended July 30, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Gently falling rain on dry soil is heavenly
Comments
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This is good. I really loved your first three stanzas, and didnt like your last one quite as much, but it ended it well. Good job!
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Thanks for your comments. I'll look at the last stanza later when I am re-editing again.
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I must ask.. where do you live?
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I live about three hours from the east coast of NSW,Australia. The edge of the plains country.
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=] Cute poem. Refreshing. Best of luck in my contest.
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This is my first Haiku. Just for the exercise of my brain.
Thank you.
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I hate the rain...
After reading this though made me change my mind. something that would pass for a heavenly write
blessed be
Blanche
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I live in a dry country and rain is its lifeblood. I love rain. Thank you for reading and enjoying my appreciation of the gift from Mother Nature.
Cheers.
Bob -
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Rain overpours here so much... I guess I just got tired of getting too much of the good thing.
lol.
I now find something ironic... you write about rain but live in a dry land. I write a lot about autumn, something which we don't really have here.
Still I love nature... whatever the case maybe.
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Just passing for refreshment
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Please stay a while, you will love it here. No hustle or bustle, no traffic, no accessible entertainment unless you make it yourself, not a lot of people but all friendly, also friendly dogs, cats, chooks and ducks. Ah yes, Lis and I are friendly too.
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Our country is said to be the driest continent on the planet. In the inland where I live rain is a beautiful thing. Thank you for your comment.I appreciate feedback, it gives m the incentive to keep going.
Cheers
Bob
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aah nice
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James, in so very few words you said it all; aah nice.
Thank you, my friend.
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Beautiful, Bob. Gentle words that convey so much. A poem of relief from the dry harshness we have lived for so long.
Your Lis.
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Lis, my love, You and I have lived through some pretty dry,dusty times and we both know how much of a treasure rain can be. Thank you again for your comments.
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