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Rain

          Mornings cold and frosty
          Now that winter has arrived.
          It'll be my birthday soon,
          Another year survived.

          Right now the rain is falling,
          Soft and gentle soaking rain
          Falls like leaves upon a pathway,
          Gets together
          Puddles drain.

          Dry crisp grass from summer
          Has new green underneath
          Soaking,wetting rain brings
          New life beyond belief.

          The garden's almost empty now
          Much bare ground can be seen
          Getting ready for the planting
          Welcoming the spring.

A contest entry

Gently falling rain on dry soil is heavenly

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  • Shrat
    July 30

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    This is good. I really loved your first three stanzas, and didnt like your last one quite as much, but it ended it well. Good job!

    • rbruce gold member
      July 30
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      Thanks for your comments. I'll look at the last stanza later when I am re-editing again.

  • rosie4491
    July 26
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    I must ask.. where do you live?

    • rbruce gold member
      July 26
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      I live about three hours from the east coast of NSW,Australia. The edge of the plains country.

  • rosie4491
    July 26
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    =] Cute poem. Refreshing. Best of luck in my contest.

    Keep it up.

    • rbruce gold member
      July 26
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      This is my first Haiku. Just for the exercise of my brain.
      Thank you.

  • Chrysalis
    June 30

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    I hate the rain...
    After reading this though made me change my mind. something that would pass for a heavenly write
    blessed be
    Blanche


    • rbruce gold member
      June 30
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      I live in a dry country and rain is its lifeblood. I love rain. Thank you for reading and enjoying my appreciation of the gift from Mother Nature.
      Cheers.
      Bob

      • Chrysalis
        June 30
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        Rain overpours here so much... I guess I just got tired of getting too much of the good thing. lol.
        I now find something ironic... you write about rain but live in a dry land. I write a lot about autumn, something which we don't really have here. Still I love nature... whatever the case maybe.
  • Just passing for refreshment


    • rbruce gold member
      June 22
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      Please stay a while, you will love it here. No hustle or bustle, no traffic, no accessible entertainment unless you make it yourself, not a lot of people but all friendly, also friendly dogs, cats, chooks and ducks. Ah yes, Lis and I are friendly too.

  • Animals
    June 21
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    Great

    that was really nice just like all your other poems.

    • rbruce gold member
      June 21
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      Our country is said to be the driest continent on the planet. In the inland where I live rain is a beautiful thing. Thank you for your comment.I appreciate feedback, it gives m the incentive to keep going.
      Cheers

      Bob

  • james119
    June 20
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    aah nice


    • rbruce gold member
      June 21
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      James, in so very few words you said it all; aah nice.
      Thank you, my friend.

  • Elisabeth silver member
    June 20

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    Beautiful, Bob. Gentle words that convey so much. A poem of relief from the dry harshness we have lived for so long.

    Your Lis.


    • rbruce gold member
      June 21
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      Lis, my love, You and I have lived through some pretty dry,dusty times and we both know how much of a treasure rain can be. Thank you again for your comments.
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