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Torn Reality

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My thoughts bisected
serrated at seams.
Torn between reality
and hopeful extremes.  

Tearing, ripping,
pulling me apart.
These chains restricting,
an artificial heart.

Within my soul
perforating deep.
Mind so worn
it begs for sleep.

Shadows roar
as twilight comes,
to this helpless existence,
I now succumb.

 

 

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  • JohnnyD gold member
    August 12

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    another great piece of story telling rhyming, I am impressed, greatly.
    Bravo once more!


    Len


  • Fritz O skennick silver member
    July 22

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    Love this...

    Great narrative, rhythm, rhyme scheme & flow...
    Particularly loved the lines 'Torn between reality
    and hopeful extremes.' & 'These chains restricting, an artificial heart.' They kinda leapt out at me as pretty damn brilliant.
    Well done!!!


  • sanguigno
    July 19

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    wow. i really love your writing. its easy to follow and definatly something i would buy if it was in books.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 21

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    Excellent!! Each stanza held something that I could so relate to!! The reality/dreams struggle, the restricting chains, the mind so worn and the shadows we succumb to!! Really captures the prompt and holds so much depth!!