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Infused Isolation

 

 

  Tourniquet torn from

  seeping deviance,

  allowing gratuitous gush

  of twisted mind

 

  Feeding upon mortal

  weakness to infuse

  power in wicked veins

 

  Dominance gained

  through destruction of

  shaky self worth

 

  I reign supreme

  in my house of conceit,

  content in toxic isolation

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Pic, 30-60 words
Credit:Toxic by =anaRasha (deviant art)


(trying to show how some gain their power by destroying others...struggled lol)

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  • CinfullyDelicious
    June 30

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    i think you showed well what you sy in an's etc sissy..this is deep and has darkness too

    loved--
    Feeding upon mortal

    weakness to infuse

    power in wicked veins



    Dominance gained

    through destruction of

    shaky self worth




    Congrat's on the HM



    Cind


  • secberm
    June 28

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    Well done, sister. Your ability to paint pictures with your words never cease to amaze. Such a fitting write for the pic. Write on you beast!

    Dez


  • Valley Girl silver member
    June 27

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    Very deep! I think that you have done a great job showing people gaining power by destroying others. Congrats on the HM! ♥


  • Abe 1
    June 24

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    wow 2 de wowza
    blow me mind why dont ya !!!!!
    fab poem
    gd luck keep um up
    abe


  • Abe 1
    June 24
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    wow 2 de wowza blow me mind why dont ya !!!!! fab poem gd luck keep um up abe *clappy* *clappy* *clappy*

  • quantumsurveyor
    June 23

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    Deeply expressive with side illuminations and cross extensions held darkly for us to penetrate; the picture held in stasis as it where with sophisticated references hidden yet exposed.

  • unsigned gold member
    June 21

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    loved this write...fantastic use of words to describe this vision...

    Well done my talented sister......better than HM I thought...

    Need to look to see who and what won here.....


    Simon


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 20

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    Congrats on the HM!

    You didn't struggle, it came across crystal clear, superbly portrayed! An awesome write hunni, congrats on the HM


  • faderman1959
    June 20

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    A very deep and wicked poem! Making it all the more powerful! Well done!


  • Weltt
    June 20

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    Your pen stirred intensity across the page and drew a picture in the mind that spoke such dark truth. Grats to you sis on this wonderful Hm!


  • Ravensdark
    June 20

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    Very powerful and provoking imagery, truly steeped in darkness oppressive....I think you got your point across very well, I was under no disilussion as to what the poem was about.....great work


  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    June 20

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    Wonderfully penned with deep thoughts here. I think this is how I live my life these days!
    Congrats on your shiny. Excellent take on the picture
    Gaylene


  • SweetXDestiny silver member
    June 20
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    beautifuly done like always
    love you auntie

  • PerfectImperfection
    June 20
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    ...


  • Sailor Ptolema silver member
    June 20
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    splendid!!


  • The Unknown Poet1
    June 19

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    Yes very well written indeed! It seems this picture has brought ouut society's sad state. Distorying one's own self-worthh is the core issue that all emotional tramas spring forth from. You use alterition and imagery nicely to convey this message well done and good luck in the contest


  • In Too Deep1 gold member
    June 19

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    Beautifully penned. I loved the language in this dark defiance. You have an imagination that is most impressive. This is sure to do well in the comp. An enjoyable read, and best wishes


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 19

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    This is a very well penned take on the given prompt. Nice use of imagery to thought. Thank you for your entry!

  • hoodoolover silver member
    June 19
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    First line is a killer...quickly followed by more killer lines, powerful work here!


  • CherokeeSiren
    June 19
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    Very good

    I like the line "content in toxic isolation" awesome job.

  • solo wisp gold member
    June 19

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    In the pic it seems like she is peeking in or trying to get a look ... yes, I see what you are doing ... the last three stanzas describe it wonderfully.


  • markgrif gold member
    June 19
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    Dark and lovely

    On my favorite words list - Tourniquet

    *huggles*


  • notorious silver member
    June 19

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    Ooh--I like this a lot! There's cockiness and evil and so much blatantness about it. What fun!

    I like the word 'tourniquet'.

    "Feeding upon mortal weakness"
    That's quite easy to do if you're say, a lawyer. Great line!

    That last stanza kicks a lot of ass--"house of conceit" (is this the sequel to 'House of Wax'? LoL, just kidding...never even watched the movie!)

    "content in isolation"
    Wow...amazing in its simplicity--it leaves the image (for me) of somebody smirking in self-contentment, a happy hermit!

    I think there should probably be a hyphen between "self worth" to make it "self-worth"...it just looks...more correct that way...LoL

    Awesome poem and good luck!


  • markgrif gold member
    June 19
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    Me wanna see. Me Wanna see.

  • Weltt
    June 19
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    Oh no....If it wasn't going to be hard enough with mark and Intoodeep1 now I have you to compete against Best of luck sis and can't wait to dive into your dark mind.
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