Fairies dance around the glen,
invisible to the likes of men.
Festivals and food galore,
parties, games and so much more.
Nymphs, dryads and fauns
joined in, danced til dawn.
Mermaids went out on a whim,
jumped for a skinny dip swim.
Music played all through the night
as the moon gleamed so bright.
Good party with plenty of laughter
as they lived happily ever after.
Share this tale with a friend.
Magic lives on without any end.
Author notes
It is kinda sonnet but it doesn't have the right syllable count so I guess it be a rhymed verse as well.
A contest entry
- Winklings Celebrates its 100th Contest (A Series) - Contest J by Lyndon.
3500 points, ended August 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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BANDITS UNITED
Just got on after a week or so off and see this Spotlight. Hope you enjoyed your dad - keep writing and wish you all the best for 2009. May be all have a healthy and happier one than 2008. Think I've commented on this one before.
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Bandits United!!
I like the flow of the stanzas. Very good imagery throughout your piece. The last line really seals the deal on your vision of magic.
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BANDITS UNITED
Great silly rhyme. well done and good flow. I missed you spotlight day.
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Bandits United!
I love the magical air you've created with this! A very fun and fantastical poem, you really draw the reader into this world, to dance and cavort in the magical realm. The rhyme is delightful, and it fulfills the proper purpose of a sonnet by tying it all together with the end couplet. I enjoyed reading this.
Well penned,
~lost
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what a delightful tale to read! great rhythm and rhyme. fantastic imagery. thank you for sharing this. your talent shines through. you are an amazing writer. keep writing poet! God bless you always
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This is a delightful look at the magical world of the unseen. What a joy filled vision that shows a diversity of creatures that know how to party!
This write was a pleasure to read and ponder, your imagery is vivid in this well written poem. 
Write on my Bandit Sister!
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit family today because WE CARE!
Brother Dennis
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I miss the enchanted realm!
With this poem I remember a little bit of the fun we had there in the mythical land of maybe. Thanks for some fairy fun.
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Sis I too love fairies! What a wonderful and lighthearted write I so enjoyed reading. Such vivid imagery and the flow was wonderful. I hope you enjoy your day in the spotlight you sure deserve it. Thanks for all you do. Sending bunches of hugs your way, love Theresa
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This is a great fantasy poem with all the right ingredients. I liked the whole concept of the fairies dancing until dawn. The rhyme is strong throughout and the poem has great flow. Fantastic to read.
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This poem was so much fun to read!
I guess we all should write happy poems like this one more often, because reading this put a broad smile on my face.
Thanks for sharing!
Happy new year!
Annie
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Bandits United!
Fun imagery throughout. Would love to attend such a party!
Tense on line one - should it be "danced" to match the rest of the poem?
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BANDITS UNITED OH YEAH!
I'm a sucker for a fairy poem. 
This one is fun to read and imagine and would make a cute 'lil book. 
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Bandits United!
This was very pretty. I loved the imagery of all the mythical creatures. Enjoy the spotlight. It was definitely well earned. Keep on sharing.
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This is such a festive, magical poem, filed with fun, and wonderful imagery. Love it!
Love & Light
Debbera"f
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Bandits United!
What a beautifully fun poem ~
This brought a smile to my face as I read
The imagery of the faeries dancing around without anyone noticing is precious and sweet
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Bandits United!
This is a pretty poem, I like the imagery that you have used here - it is magical lovely!
Keep writing
Polly
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BANDITS UNITED
I think that you did a lovely job here thanks for sharing best wishes always be well.
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I love this. Then again, I'm sure you knew I would seeing as how we talked about this.
Your reference to all things magickal is just amazing.
A beautiful piece with excellent flow and a lot of innocent magick.
Shari
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BANDITS UNITED
A lovely gem full of the magic on a midsummer's night. It is a wonderful poem that makes one smile while reading it.
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Each line traces its way merrily back to the title.
Festival, celebration without reason is very easy to
believe when it comes to faerie folk~they take joy
in the magic of life. I do find the flow a bit uneven, but it is rhymed well and stays focused.
Blue
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A magical tale.I'm glad you included a Mermaid into the proccedings.the rhyme seems fine to me.Good luck, Ros
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sounds like an enjoyable night to remember. haviong fun is great feeling. thanks for sharing this. success in your contest.
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This is such a delightful idea and the story is well told and is so appealing. There is though, a problem as I see it, the rhythm is very uneven and this destroys the flow - 7,9,7,7; 5,5,7,7; 7,6,9,10; 7,9. I "stuttered" as it were as I read it and I think such a good idea deserves a degree of rhythmic editing.
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Even though the syllable count ins't all uniform. In the first stanza three of the four lines end in seven syllables. The second stanza, 5,5,7,7 have the first two lines in consistent syllables and the second two lines in consistent syllables. This is almost in a haiku syllable count. The third stanza being 7,6,9,10 the seven syllable count is consistent with the repeating 7 syllables that the other lines follow. The last two lines 7,9 match the reapting 7 syllable line and the last line matches the 9 syllable count in the third line of the third stanza. Though not planned this way, it does have some pattern.
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Indeed, I can see your argument and I thank you for your patient explanation. I only mentioned the actual syllable count because I found that reading it aloud I stumbled more than once (it's the way I read them! LOL) Only then did I check the syllables to try to find why I was stumbling. Keep on truckin' Donald
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