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Freedom Soars

 

 

   Smokey veils wisp wonder,

   clouding stars to peeking delight

   In pirouette perfection they

   twinkle joy upon this sight

 

   Prancing spirit soars pleasurable

   following freedom's celestial call

   Releasing soul to heavenly elation,

   untamed in heart's boundless enthral

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Pic, 20-40 words (36)
"Veils" By: Myles Pinkney (deviant art)

(What a gorgeous pic!! Yayy happy one for a change)

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    July 19

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    Such beautiful imagery you painted the picture for us so clearly, no visional add was needed...lovely
    congrat's on the well deserved Silver...
    Sis


  • jamiedoring gold member
    July 1

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    Wow....your words could have paitned that picture even if you didnt post it atop. AMAZING, absolutly beautiful.


  • poppa silver member
    June 28

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    great write....dripping with imagery...congrats on your silver


  • Valley Girl silver member
    June 27

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    Another fantastic write! Lovely imagery! Congrats on the Silver! ♥


  • Ravensdark
    June 22

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    Surely I am in the presence of one of my betters....excellent flow and imagery....congratulations on the silver shiny...


  • phantasyintrigue-x silver member
    June 21

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    So much freedom and happiness in 2 concise stanzas...congratulations on the Silver, it was well-deserved my fellow devil.

    "pirouette perfection"
    Such peaceful and soft imagery...and double P words...awesome.

    And OH MY GOD, this rhymes in such a subtle manner...you know, this could probably be a children's book if it weren't for all those advanced words. LoL, great poem...the only thing that probably should be changed is 'smokey' to 'smoky'. Apparently they're 2 different words with 2 different meanings (LoL, I checked on dictionary.com/, I'm kind of lame like that.)

    ,
    Jessica


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 20

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    Congrats on the silver!

    Yay happy happy! Beautifully penned hunni, so deserving of a silver. Fab pic to. Well done


  • Weltt gold member
    June 20

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    This left me with such a rich happiness and was a pleaure to read. Had almost a sing song quality to it that heightened the emotion of the piece. Nice picture to write for and you did it so well. Beautiful silver sis!


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 20

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    A beautiful interpretation of the prompt and well deserving of the silver...Sue


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    June 20
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    A well deserved silver. Congrats, Juls


  • solo wisp gold member
    June 19

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    Such a beautiful flowing poem my Kiwi Queen!

    I see 'wisp' ... hmmm. roflrflrlf

    Love the alliteration and rhyme you've used ... also some unique word usage! YaY!

    Congrats on the Silver ...


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 19
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    ....


  • Stardust-luvr
    June 19

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    wow im at a loss for words in the profound imagery that shone from your pen many blessings always xxx


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 19

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    A very well penned piece to go along with the given prompt. Great flow and feeling throughout. Thank you for your entry!

  • Lotus-Mama silver member
    June 19

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    Glad Im not the only one who saw smokey! This is absolutely beautiful! Great job!!!

    "In pirouette perfection they

    twinkle joy upon this sight"




  • penman gold member
    June 19
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    Excellent

    A wonderful creation for the prompt. So descriptive and creative. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Bob Fox
    June 19

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    Isis

    She may be lloking down and smiling now. adorned by brilliant stars of all colors. And she has a place waiting for you in the Silver age


  • Lucy. gold member
    June 19

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    A pretty poem for a pretty picture. See! You did well after all.


  • ShadowsMidnightRose
    June 19
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    Beautiful! This is perfectly penned.....

    Good luck in the contest and get well soon!

  • Lucy. gold member
    June 19
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    Get well soon.
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