An ominous dark
is the sky above.
The silent fading sun,
it over taken swiftly.
Such power in the gusts,
as the show begins.
An opening overture
to a magnificent show.
Electric blue flashes,
and deep purple flares;
the accompaniment;
to a melody
of ghastly haunting roars.
Trees begin to sway;
then dance in rapid motion.
Tiny glittering gems to do fall,
to swell with strength and pride.
Glorified raindrop dancers
arrive to close this show;
beginning this final act.
Chaos reaches a crescendo,
then diminuendos down to nothing.
It all just ended;
everything just stopped.
Author notes
Ever watched a summer thunderstorm? This is how it goes. Enjoy. I hope I did well.
Ummm... Option six I think. (The nature one...)
A contest entry
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Very very well done. Best of luck in the contest! You are an incredibly talented writer. :] -
I love this. Its how storms are,exsept I dont see the beauty in them most of the time because I am scared of them Good poem though! Good luck on the contest!
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Wow.. I really like the imagery in this poem. I have to say, my favorite stanza is:
"Electric blue flashes,
and deep purple flares;
the accompaniment;
to a melody
of ghastly haunting roars."
It just gives so much, description, to a summer storm.
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Very visual and imaginative... yeah i can seee this happening in my head. great work... did have a bit of an awkward flow but other than that really good.
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Wow i could picture everything as i read it. Its very cute. Very well written my favorite part is when you said "Chaos reaches a crescendo," that was worded so good. I like it alot thanks for entering my contest. i wish you the best of luck
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Shelly -
The only thing I would do is drop the "s" in "raindrops". Otherwise, this is an excellent way to see a summer storm. And you're right - this is how the storms go. I especially liked the last stanza...something just struck me about it. And I don't think it was lightning. (Yea, yea...I had to try the joke.
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Great poem, and good luck reading it at the performance thing!
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There's an s? oopps. Typo. Thanks for telling me.
Nice joke... 
I think I did okay... Everyone told me I did. So it's all good.
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Totally wonderful, there is nothing like the weather to act like a muse is there, the other day I looked outside to the awful weather and wrote 'Dark and Heavy skies' Its winter here but our weather has been unusually warm, you can wear a t-shirt all day even on the stormy ones.
You have captured the magic of a summer storm so well, I love storms, (particularly summer ones) as long as they don't blow the roof off or something equally as devastating. Keep up your wonderful work.
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Musical! That's what I first thought as I read your poem. I've never really thought of comparing a summer thunderstorm to a musical, and even so, the results were amazing! My fave part is the last stanza. I do wish you the best of luck for the reading of this wonderful piece tommorow...and don't worry, with an amazing piece that's written by a talented writer like you, it reading should go smooth as peanut butter (the smooth ones, not the chunky ones!)
<3
~Faithful-Star
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WOW!!! This is really good! I never thought of a thunderstrom like that. I always thought they were something bad.....at least thats how I picture them when I'm writing. This poem shows a different side that I never would have imagined.
Great Job Sis!
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thanks.
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