His laughter floats in from the den,
a sweet smile caresses my face.
Such happiness moves me to pen
of the love I have in his place.
Cultured pearls surround my plump neck,
they replace for me a sad past.
What a chunk they took from his check,
so the dried rose, that will e'er last.
Alas, faith is not his strong suit,
but on him, my life, I would trust.
Admiration leaves me quite mute
of Michael, for he is so just.
To the beach he promised we'd go.
Lie in the sand, bask in the sun,
in Beliz` when we get the dough.
Lovely honeymoon, so much fun.
But for right now we just cuddle,
He watches TV and I write.
Under the sheets loving huddle;
sweet love making all through the night.
Never do we go to bed mad,
no matter who's right or who's wrong.
Who would make their best friend feel bad,
'cause ,with him is where I belong.
Author notes
Option Four (Word Bank)
Option 2 "We bloom in life just as flowers when tended properly."
Option Four-Lukewarm Coffee
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wow what a gem, this is really strong, sopme wonderful imagry
nice write indeed
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"Never do we go to bed mad"
Agreed. I can't think of one thing that I can argue with my boyfriend about, it just seems ridiculous to fight with him, so we never have. This was a wonderful poem full of your love and emotion for this boy. Very nice write, keep up the great work! -
Why Micheal? Because you love him! This is touching and sweet and a wonderful reminder that we should enjoy the simple things in life, like just being together.
When we are so busy "doing" something, we forget how to just "be."
Garrison
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No matter how touching and well written this poem is, forgive me for this, but I can't help thinking this poem edged its way into this contest based on the brief mention of pearls in line five. Thanks for entering though.
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Excellent write
Beautiful indeed and such love should be felt for all
Bravo
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Great rhyming scheme! I especially like the last stanza! Such honesty unhampered by rhyme is impressive to behold! Best of luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your entry in our contest. A very romantic and personal poem that was a pleasure to read.
Please join us in our future contests...Sue and Jeff
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this is very sweet and cute. He sounds like a positively great guy. I hope you are always happy together. The part about him being just struck a deep chord in me, as well as the title.
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a very nice write, i liked it
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Awe you sure show the contentment and love throughout this piece what a wonderful image of the love between two people in this piece.
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Awe you sure show the contentment and love throughout this piece what a wonderful image of the love between two people in this piece.
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The title caught my eye. My son's name was Michael.
This write of love is simple but beautiful. I loved it. May God always bless you both
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sounds like true love to me. This was very well written and so sweet.
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Isn't love grand! And so good to never, ever go to bed mad! Who can sleep when lying in bed feeling angry!? Thanks for sharing of your love for Michael. ***Pam***
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a very heartfelt story of true love! this is a rare thing these days and I pray it lasts till death do you part
Beautiful!
GBY
SilverButterfly *rose
(Mary)
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AH! IT IS SO REFRESHING TO READ ABOUT TRUE LOVE. LATELY ALL I'VE BEEN READING ABOUT IS ANGER AND LOVE LOST. THE WORD OF GOD TELLS US TO BE ANGRY BUT DO NOT SIN. DON'T LET THE SUN GO DOWN ON YOUR WRATH. I FEEL THAT THIS IS ALSO THE KEY TO A HAPPY AND PROSPEROUS RELATIONSHIP. GOD BLESS YOU!
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
This is an excellent piece of poetry. I found that such love is something to hold on tightly to and that it never truly fades.
The picture is a nice added touch to the wordbank that you have used well.
Welcome to allpoetry, I hope you enjoy the site
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Miss Faerie
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Very, very well written. I applaud ur usage of rhymes as well, all blend fine and makes a perfect poetic feast. Thansk for the entry -
There is no substitute for that feeling of being where you belong. I'm happy that you found it in arms of someone you trust and love. Best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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this is really good hun, your rhyming seemed alittle off not by much but just alittle and it didnt flow the best[dont kill me if you didnt want critique] but alas i liked the poem, welcome to AP, nice work
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This is such a compelling write. Wonderfull portraying the man you feel so close too. There is true passion in your words. A blessing to the one you feel compelled to tell this story too and about.
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Awesome
It is clear that you have found true love. I love the flow; the rhyme; and the sentiments expressed.
Great Job.
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i am sure he liked it, i did. well written i think.
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Superb
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Such wise words you've spilled here. True admiration for your counterpart. Never go to bad mad, no matter whom is at fault. I love that. Well done poet.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to AP.
Storm
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welcome to allpoetry
Very nice. I especially like your first stanza. Your words move with love and admiration. Thank you for entering the contest and sharing your heart.
Keep writing on.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautiful write filled with emotions and sentiment that I found gripping and made extradionary use of the options and words. you have spilled out a whole tale of imagery and emotion which really allows thee reader to become a part of what you are writing. a wonderful piece that is flooded with love well done.
Charlotte
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Now that' love! You must have the best relationship. How wonderfully sweet that is.
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Awesome poem and so very loving. You have a beautiful imagery balanced by sweet reality....Love pours fron each verse...excellent write...novy
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Well firstly...welcome to AP! I hope you experience as many happy hours here as I and so many others have...it is a great place to make good friends who share your love of poetry, and get feedback on the things you're writing. But be careful - it's addicting!
Your poem...is very well written. Wonderful attention to meter and rhyme, and the thoughts are very sweet. The only thing I might suggest is putting an exclamation point after the line "oh no, there's gonna be a fight." I looked at the word bank, and you've done a fantastic job of incorporating the words into the poem. It all sounded very natural, which is hard to do sometimes. I've had a Michael in my life too, so your title drew me to the poem...I wasn't sure what I would find, love or hate. lol (But I'm glad it was love.
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Trips to exotic places would be a lot of fun...I'd love to do more traveling myself someday...but just being in front of the TV or doing other daily things together is what, IMO, truly strengthens a relationship.
Good luck in the contest, and best wishes in all your writing endeavors!
~J.
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Beautiful poem.....shows the tenderness of heart and love...good luck in your contest..
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Hi DeGraw
Well done poet This is such an excellent poem So romantic I feel this way about my sweetheart Don't wait until you are old to start having adventures though thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
Barbara
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Welcome To Allpoetry
Hi DeGraw
You've done a great job with the wordbank your poem was sweet and filled with romance. Goodluck in the contest
Andy
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Hi DeGraw,
This was such a tender write, it's so sweet and simple. Great use of the words. I loved this, wonderful job! Thanks for a lovely entry.
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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