you're every part i hate of me
the reason i know hate
theres anger that resides within
it often screams your name
you're the elephant in my room
so hard to ignore
the pain in my chest
its agonizing to explore
a plague that eats my fields
the reason i'm not more
Author notes
thelizardking. option 6
A contest entry
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650 points, ended June 28, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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You had some definate feelings in the poem, but I think you could have expanded it more than you did. My favorite is the last line, the line that I think you could have changed is the elephant line. It didn't flow as well as it could have. Good job, and thank you for entering in my contest.
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