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Reclusarch

I buried the reclusarch in the heart of darkness,

I buried me deep into the faltering cacophony,

Seeking to lay my head down,

Between the jaw's of death,

To find solace in the gloaming,

Far from roving eye,

Bite down, draw blood, bleed me,

Push a nail through my hands,

And call me a martyr,

Fool do not what I say...

Bitterness is a meal best served to one,

Bent and twisted, poor pitiful peon,

No tears for me damn you,

Tears are reserved for a noble death,

Not this dark deterioration,

I can't find the battleground,

But was I meant to?

 

Time tells no secrets, listens not,

It has ears only for the stars,

Who sing only emptiness,

That builds inside me,

To drain away with the blood,

Running down my arms,

 Silence be my comfort,

Wont you shut out the sound,

Of blackened hearts screaming,

Drip the dried blood down my throat....

Darkness in the heart of the reclusarch,

Buried in the crypt of forsaken vessels,

'Neath the mirrored water's of the Styx,

Stygian be this twilight,

Fraught with the wandering madness,

Woe to the unwary, be consumed,

Vines grow crooked, shackles close,

Caught....

Reclusarch with a crown of thorns,

Matyr for the unworthy, I......

Know the light and the way,

Yet I fall upon my sword,

Scratching runes into the blade,

As I descend on the pain,

Feeding remorseful runes with soul shreds,

That quiver, still living.....

Witness to the blackening,

That consumes the vagrant hearts,

Empty, soulless, parched....

Numb,

In a chemical induced solace,

Don't follow me,

This way leads to a pit of swords,

Waiting to taste the sadness,

Of creatures born into light,

And endings soon to begin,

In the dark heart of the reclusarch....

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  • YesterdaysDreams
    February 16

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    This was undeniably haunting .


    Bite down, draw blood, bleed me,

    Push a nail through my hands,

    And call me a martyr,

    those words kept running though my head over and over again. They caught me up and held me for the entirely of this write.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Oh my

    In this write I get the feeling of someone who has had a horrible life . Maybe abuse to the point he thinks and lives it over and over again .Maybe someone who has been abused by words of uncaring saying your nothing your no good .I cry for I can not fathom being raised in that way and my heart goes out to any child to be subjected to such in this world . Its sad to write of these things but be must release the pain from within and let it go


  • individuality gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly, ah bitterness, it sweeps in on all of us sometimes and we have to eat it or die.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    June 25, 2008

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    Excellent

    Wow, an incredible write indeed. Marvelous imagery. On of your lines reminded me of a story by Joseph Conrad;
    "The Heart of Darkness". You may already be familiar with it for those who may not be, I'll try and find a link to it. Here's a link to the Wikipedia (free on line encyclopedia) article on: "The Heart of Darkness".
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Heart_of_Darkness


  • ShaShay
    June 25, 2008

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    I am not sure why I like this write but I do. Usually dark is not for me but this captured my eyes and would not let go till the end. Your meter was perfect, vocabulary well chosen and message came through like the blood flowed as you described. Very well done.


  • crazymomma
    June 25, 2008

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    Very vivid and amazing imagery in this. Normally I am not a big fan of dark poetry but this drew me in and kept me there to the end

  • hardeepb
    June 25, 2008

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    Envision

    All I see when I read this is a black heart; pumping black blood. I don't usually read poetry this dark but it is a very well written. The Asides on the right add to the subtle effect of pain; and it takes an extra read or two to fully grasp the darkness of it.

    Different for me, but none the less an intriguing; self-sadistic piece. Unique, 7.5/10!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Dark Journey

    My sweet dear friend...always I am captured in thy words...so splendid. You amaze my senses.

    Love~
    Sue


  • Sanshay
    June 22, 2008
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    Dark and demonic, almost vampirish...gave me a sensual rush but not sure why. I like how you write


  • subliminal girl
    June 20, 2008

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    You know that your work leaves me rather speechless and how hard it is for me to find words to do justice to you and your talent but I will try... It is a very impressive piece you created here, ... incredibly painful as I found it... yet very powerful, in a dark and ominous way..... your descriptive choice of words and the vivid imagery underlined the pain that lies within this poem even more...
    brilliant work...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    Ahh the sinking into the dark.. the overwhelming sense of dire circumstance leading to the fall...

    Powerful darkness here my friend! Yet I feel you shall be followed...

    Excellent penning!


  • The Unknown Poet1
    June 20, 2008

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    This is extremely dark and in a metaphoric way seems/feels personal. As if the internal struggle has won and the writer has relented into falling victim to lf-destruction though with conscious meaning hholed-up inisde his own head not allwing another to follow the obstacle course of inflicted pain. Nice images weaved throughout this piece


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 20, 2008

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    WOW!!! I have said it before and shall say it again, you are a master of the poetic darkness. Very intense and so powerfully penned! Excellent depths, plunging into the abyss of thought. Excellent write!

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