There's an envelope.
It's sealed,
waiting for my birthday
when it will explode open
and release from it
a rampaging secret.
It tells you
it allows one on a plane.
A big chunk of metal,
crafted and painted,
put in sadistic seats
and screaming children -
And none of them are yours.
And that ticket isn't mine.
At least hug me when you say goodbye.
Author notes
Yup, more rambling. Last one.
A contest entry
- That was you? Omg I'm sorry ( For Everyone :] ) by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
450 points, ended June 24, 2008, 52 entries
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Wow.
This is very interesting. The first line "There's an envelope." It pulled me in. I could picture everything as i read. Its kinda sad
. Very well written. Worded so great. I like it alot. So thanks for entering my contest
i wish you the best of luck.
for you
..<3..
Shelly
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Painstaking yet grabs you,, seduces you in....Reminds me of all the kids aand moms crying at airports....Love the ramblings..they are usually the best because they are not polished or fake...they stand alone....awesome
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That's actually pretty much exactly what it's about, actually. Thanks for the sincere comment
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This makes sense to me, coz I know details... and obviously because I'm like so cool
I prefer the latter reasoning to understanding this amazing piece of writing.
'And none of them are yours.
And that ticket isn't mine.
At least hug me when you say goodbye.'
Those three lines, so simple, so sad
Just... I don't know what to tell you Sorry *hangs head*
loves.
♥
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Of course it's coz you're so cool
duh, everyone knows that!
Speak soon
♥
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Chell Belle...
You ok darling? This sounds a bit sad But it is a great read! You did a great job on it.
I am here for you, you know that..
and love
Mom
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:(
I'm sorry, sweet heart I love you, and I'm here for you.
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Someone's leaving =[
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