Simpering sweet sounds
silhouetted by darkness
slip, sliding through shadows.
Flittering flute, violent violin
clash, calmly fighting
through dark night.
Intertwining hesitantly,
perturbed by silence,
a beat without a soul-
only anger can find them here.
Author notes
Dark Duet.
A contest entry
- Quikie! 11 places reserve your spot by Folklor.
600 points, ended June 23, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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I love the imagery. I know a lot about anger. I can definitely relate to this poem. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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gret sibilance alliteration at the beginning. fantastic
'Flittering flute, violent violin
clash, calmly fighting'
I loved the way you used an oxymoron to describe the way the instruments voices cash and collide. beautifully crafted.
'a beat without a soul-
only anger can find them here.'
What a fantastic ending
a beat without a soul!
when i read it it sounds like a stopping heart beat
and the persnified anger tops this off, well done loved it -
WOW!!! Now this was awesome!!! Excuse my use of such a juvenile word but.....It truly is an awesome piece of work!! I love the imagery here and your verbage was just incredible!!! Every line was perfection! Best wishes....
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aww wow, really like this, it reads quickly and well.
good luck in the contest and takecare
stephanie
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wow thats a great write... this is really awesome and it so says dark duet... thanks for sharing this and good luck in contest....!
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