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A Simple Profession

In a simpler time perhaps
we would not be cast out
for purulent thoughts.
The joy of touch is
not equaled to condemnation.
Scarlett is not a colour
of eternal judgement but
rather a colour to stimulate
thoughts into erotic fantasies.
Where writhing in frenzies
under partner de jour is as
acceptable as wearing white
after labor day...

In an honest moment of lucidity
we compromise who we are
to grace the pages of society,
all the while worrying if
we can achieve that climatic stage.
Falling prey once more to
hearts sinful desires.

Angles of the body protrude
as heightened awareness
rolls off the tongue,
lapping up the small crumbs
that are left after
the feast is over.


And slowly as reality
crumbles back into place
and labored breathing subsides
I realize I don't even know your name....

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  • KayJay46 gold member
    July 23

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    What a great write... and a closing that tickles us with an embarassing memory or two and makes us chuckle guiltily... Not me, of course
    Bravo!
    Ken


  • imahealer gold member
    July 22

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    Girl, you really know how to write. Prostitution, the oldest and most profitable profession in the world, has long been spat upon, and the women ostracized. I haver always felt, "there but for the grace of God go I". Child prostitution is abhorable, but adults who consent to this way of fulfilling erotic desires are no more sinners than liars. Your last line really took the cake from a woman's point of view! Just pay me, and who cares? So happy you won bronze.
    Love,
    Linda

  • This is a very good piece. Especially captivating are stanzas 2 and 3. The last line however, though it is relevant and non-cliche' at all, is not as powerful an ending as I was hoping for.

    Nevertheless, a good quality write.

  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 30

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    Wow, this is fantastically written! Love how you took the prompt, you nailed it hunni! All the best in the contest but you shouldn't need it


  • Weltt gold member
    June 20

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    Such truth to the depth of your written word. this may just be my favorite from you and will be visiting this again for sure. Loved it! what more can I say?

  • Great take on the prompt, excellent writing. Well done, I say.

  • dustookie2 silver member
    June 19

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    Well why would you want to know a name of a faceless person ...they pay for a service but your regulars now that is a different story. You paint the imagery well in words from the title and introduction setting up the atmosphere. The very impressive ending is the lingering thought I hold Brilliant take on the prompt....good luck.


  • Balldinger silver member
    June 19

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    working...

    what's in a name? professionally speaking, do we even need to know? a slick presentation on a greasy platter the size of all our egos chopped into a fine olive tray. Where the Byzantine trail fixes its shifting endeavor, port towns will soon find out... ~ EZB

    www.moodgroove.com


  • Ithica silver member
    June 19

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    I think this is the best you have written to date... This is really a fantastic piece... Bravo!!! [And that IS my honest opinion!!!]

  • A simple profession...yet the oldest too. You have caught the emotion and darkness so right with this one my friend. In simpler times you would not have been cast out for such thoughts, that is so true.

    But times do change. I love the very imagery of this too. It speaks volumes, especially the ending, which is superb. Well done JC. Amazing writing. Good luck in the contest.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx

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