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He's Hurting Me.



Oh Mum can't you see the tears rolling down my eyes,

the smiles and the giggles are a horrible disguise.

Oh Mum can't you see that I am dying deep inside,

hidden behind a false mask, covering up his lies.

Oh Dad can't you see that I'm being ripped apart,

I know you had suspicions right from the start.

Oh Dad can't you hear the beating of my heart,

painful and lonely, the beat's right off the chart.

Oh Mum can't you notice I visit less and less each day,

the man I thought I loved has been pulling me away.

Oh Mum can't you notice that when I say that I'm okay,

I turn my face to the side; I'm ashamed of what I'll say.

Oh Dad can't you see the look of anger in his narrowed eyes,

when I tell him I was out with friends, he says they're all lies.

Oh Dad don't you understand I'm looking forward to when he dies,

for I can't escape from his callous grip, despite many tries.

Oh Mum can't you come and take me back home with you?

Oh Dad can't you hold me really close like you used to do?

Oh Mum can't you nurse my heart and my broken bones,

Oh Dad can't you come around and take me back to home.

Oh Mum look at these bruises, Mum can't you see?

Oh Dad don't you notice, Dad - he's hurting me.

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If want to know what it means, ask...But it should be obvious, about a girl going through abuse and violence with her boyfriend that she lives with.

I actually quite like this one.

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  • Wow! This gave me chills! The emotions were so raw and vivid! A beautiful and chilling piece!

    Thanks!
    ~Angi

  • Shit!! this is an amazing write. I felt like i was right there with you in your desperation as you wrote this. Your words are so powerful and painful. I am so sorry that you have to go through this. I can relate to every word of this so well...the confusion in the fact that you dont understand how people cant see what is going on under their nose. I guess over the years i have learnt that people only see what they want to see...if you put on a smile then people will take that as gosple and not look further into the pain in your eyes because it is easier. IT saves their feelings and their greatest fears coming true. I am so sorry for you pain. If you ever need to talk i am here for you.
    Great write and thiank you for entering my contest x


  • Mistress Masquerade
    June 29, 2008

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    I like how it repeats but quite frankly did not feel as much emotion from this as I had hoped. Thank you for youe entry and good luck.


  • Number 13
    June 27, 2008
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    Sad yet beautiful.

  • LoveToLaugh07
    June 21, 2008

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    This is really good, quite sad yes, but still very well written. I hope that you didn't have to go through this. I'm sorry if you did. Good luck in the contest.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 20, 2008
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    and good luck in the contest

  • Disturbed Prodigy
    June 20, 2008

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    there is nothing that i can think to say, that will not be said afraid me or before me about this, but i will say this powerful cries keep it flowing


  • Kiss the girl--x
    June 19, 2008

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    This was beautifully and horribly sad
    Painful, but beautiful in the simple way you wrote this, really really like the rhyme too

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