As I sit and watch an angel put her little one to bed.
Tender feelings fill my heart as warm and fuzzy thoughts fill my head.
I have seen her tuck sweet little Ivy in oh so many times.
I've watched her tell her stories and read her nursery rhymes.
But of all the wonderful things she does to put her little one to sleep.
One is my absolute favorite and it is garenteed to touch my soul and almost make me weep.
Oh when she sings to Ivy it is better than a choir of angels singing from above.
Her face starts glowing with motherly pride as her voice fills the room with love.
The sight brings warmth to my heart and a tear to my eye.
As I listen to each sweet note of Nina's heavenly lullaby.
A contest entry
- Berceuse by ea.
1000 points, ended July 7, 2008, 10 entries
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450 points, ended July 11, 2008, 77 entries
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960 points, ended July 13, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
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475 points, ended July 25, 2008, 13 entries
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600 points, ended July 20, 2008, 39 entries
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300 points, ended August 11, 2008, 58 entries
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1200 points, ended September 13, 2008, 340 entries
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750 points, ended February 27, 23 entries
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1800 points, ended April 8, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Honorable Mention Pre-Write by Leance.
450 points, ended July 19, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i like the long line rhyming poems when they are done well. this takes talent and you are blessed with that talent. it tells a sweet and envhanting story. thanks for entering.
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This is a really lovely sweet poem. I like the words you've used to describe. It's a really warm, touching poem, well done.
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This is quite a touchig poem and you've really managed to get across the emotiom in this very well. It has a good flow to it and I like the rhyming.
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This is very lovely. The descriptiveness added to the overall feel of love for the mother of your child. In this line "One is my absolute favorite and it is garenteed to" it should be guaranteed though. Other than that a wonderful and heart touching poem. Thanks for entering and good luck
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this is a nice little piece. it shows the love of a mother and I can actually picture it because a lot of mother's read and sing to their little ones....especially singing to a baby. there is nothing better to hear as a baby than that of the mother's voice. great write and thank you for entering.
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"Tender feelings fill my heart as warm and fuzzy thoughts fill my head. I have seen her tuck sweet little Ivy in oh so many times." great job i liked this alot. short and you made a point. Great job. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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love it!
yep. =]
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Hi, This is a heartfelt tribute to Ivy's mother and it does have a nice lullaby theme and lilt to it which I think would be enhanced by breaking up the lines a bit more and by eliminating the periods at the end of lines that seem to run into the next. If you would like me to send an IM about how I would structure this differently, let me know. Thank you for the berceuse.
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Sweet and endearing! Good job!
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Absolutely beautiful!
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