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Ophelia

He holds me no longer in his weary heart,

His words are concave, his mind wanders

To the time he awaits; when he depart

This iniquitous place and no one ponders.

My heart now collapses in its wintry fears

And with my profound knowledge, I shall die

And leave this murky place of sorrow and tears

With no melancholy, shallow words, no goodbye.


My saccharine love for him has broken me

And sent my spinning mind into the abyss;

I shatter, drowning in the icy shadowy sea

And be left naught but a spectre, to reminisce.


Hamlet, I leave thee with my innermost regret,

And entreat that I will not be a girl to forget.

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  • Judith Chandler
    June 21, 2008

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    "Saccharine love" - implying that her love for Hamlet is somehow not very deep or genuine? Interesting use of the word. I liked the image of Ophelia's ghost being left to reminisce.

    Enjoyed this write. Thanks for entering.


    • Anneintherain
      June 21, 2008
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      Thank you for the silver! the use to saccharine love to me is more about something that is said in Twelfth Night, about women not being able to love as deeply as men. Bullshit, of course, but I thought it was strangely fitting