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Forever With You

 

 

Hear my voice upon the winds
singing tender lullabies
Feel my touch in gentle rains
 that fall from summer skies
In calm and gentle waters
see my eyes reflecting back
Know my love, shines through every star
as they brighten evenings dark and black
I am all around you still
I'm never far, Please know I'm near
Hold me forever in your hearts
and I will never disappear

Author notes

I am not very good at this type of poem, but I felt I should give it a shot. Hope it is somewhat comforting

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  • Amarige
    June 20, 2008
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    So lovely...and the background again is stunning..im in awe for your talent..God bless!
    Ruby


  • Cannonsfire
    June 19, 2008

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    When sorrow takes a hand
    & takes a heart as well,
    there is refuge in a poem
    where all of us can dwell
    we can write the words
    to comfort and to ease,
    your heart is safe with my words
    and your sadness I will ease... Love, C


  • Nature Song silver member
    June 19, 2008
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    Forever near...What a lovely title for this poem. The background set it off so well.

    "Feel my touch in gentle rains
    that fall from summer skies
    In calm and gentle waters'

    Feel my touch all around, I'm never far. Love that stanza! Good luck in your contest. ~Sie

  • piccola silver member
    June 19, 2008

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    Oh this is beautiful. Better than any Hallmark card and the background is gentle and beautiful too. Great job (for a man lol) just joking. Really great.


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    June 19, 2008
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    Who said you were not good at this?
    "Feel my touch in gentle rains
    that fall from summer skies"

    Soft reassuring words spoken here.
    You have done a wonderful job.
    Well done. I enjoyed reading your words and the background fits perfectly.
    Juls


  • Patpowers silver member
    June 19, 2008

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    You did excellent Bret!

    I thought you did okay with this! Good rhyme and message on romance. My best of luck to you in the contest!!


  • FunnelWaxFate
    June 19, 2008

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    Oh, yes, this is a glorious comfort of a write!!! Amazing…such a tender, soothing write…very serene and calm, as well as ardent and beautiful. The language is so touching and superb, and the imagery and emotion are most profound. It reminded me slightly of how Tennyson wrote about reference to nature and his grief in In Memoriam, feeling close with a lost loved one through nature, and how that can put an aching heart at ease and provide comfort, to still feel close that way. This is quite beautiful. Those last four lines are brilliant, and I especially adored the lines, “In calm and gentle waters/see my eyes reflecting back/Know my love, shines through every star/as they brighten evenings dark and black” Very well done write!


    • Sanguinarius
      June 19, 2008
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      Thank you ever so much for such an encouraging comment, I am glad that you found this piece fitting for the contest it was written for ~Bret~


  • Angelflower
    June 19, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job hun.. You do really good dark stuff, but you showed that you can do just as good with light hearted stuff as well. I really liked this.. You should try this "new" style more often.. Best of luck hun.. *hugs*


    Angel


    • Sanguinarius
      June 19, 2008
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      Thanks Angel, The dark stuff just flows so easily, but this sort just seems to be so forced, Glad that you like it though. I couldn't very well write in my normal "style" for a contest such as this ~Bret~


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    June 19, 2008

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    this is really good hun, i love this border and poem,
    its so beautiful, i love this bret i really do,
    all my love,
    kitty xxx

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