Solve me, please!
Plumb the depths
of my heart and soul!
Read me until
you know me whole.
Don't stop until
this puzzle's solved.
Don't quit now or
lose your resolve.
There's a secret deep
within my heart.
Uncover it, please,
before you part.
Reach down through
tempestuous seas,
of stormy emotions
and lunacies.
Puzzle it out.
Use your mind.
Then the real me
you may find.
Won't you solve me, please?
Author notes
based on the following quote:
"Oh ! You said that I am a puzzle, then, please solve me"...Unknown
A contest entry
- please solve me... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 20, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Something Different! by Trent plus pen.
800 points, ended August 19, 2008, 50 entries
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500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 37 entries
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Comments
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Wonderful
I really like this poem. It has a nice rhythm to it and I like the message. The only part I didn't like was the very last line. It was a little disappointing because the rhyme seemed forced for that. It was the only part that did. Something like "There's a real me / you can find" would have been better, I think (though not necessarily that exactly). The cadence seemed a little off for the line "There's a secret deep" but it was still acceptable. The rest was great!
I think "Reach down through / tempestuous seas, / of stormy emotions / and lunacies" was my favorite part.
Still Anonymous
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Thank you! I really appreciate your comments and suggestions!
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Nice description and impressive invitation to bring the solutions...I love this piece..thanks for your wonderful entry....
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Thank you! I am glad that you enjoyed it.
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