I am constantly dehydrated
Withering in loneliness
You quench my thirst
Then you leave,
Leave me thirsty for more.
You’re like a drug
You comfort me with your presence
Then you leave,
Leave me thirsty for more.
I can never fully satisfy
The thirst I have for you.
The dehydration I suffer
Every time you leave my side.
It completely rules my mind.
Every second you’re away
I dream of seeing you again
My thirst everlasting
At least, until you come again
To temporarily, momentarily
Quench my everlasting
Thirst for you.
Author notes
Sorta rough I think... This was last night's late night freewrite.
Please give me any suggestions
Comments
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Whoa
This is like my dream lover. I dream about the same person all of the time and its like I can never actually stay sleep long enough for well you know...great write!!!
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wow!
this is absolutely brilliant! this write was dorta dark but very well written! i like the imagery here.. and the comparisons! you've linked this poem very weill with a stunning endind! keep writing!
brilliant!!!
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That was really good. My favorite was the last stanza. It was great overall. You might want to mention something like "you barely quench my thirst with you brief visits" though i'm no expert. Keep on writing the good stuff. S.I.
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