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Offering



Like a mattress familiar in harmonious covets,
retinas courtier in an atmosphere moist, 
a silky fabric embroidered with satin fragrant flora
in cradle of intense subtle gracious sapphire patches,
to thank my "SIR" with affections solemnise
in beams confession of an offering, rising sliding rays.




















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Prompt: Sunrises

Contest - Favorite Things by Pamela A Lamppa

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 3, 2008
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    I am not certain I have ever read a sunrise like this one. Your use of interesting vocabulary truly takes this piece above the mundane and cliche.

    Thank you for this lovely entry. Websters and I enjoyed - and I learned some new words today. ~Pamela


  • marlene47 silver member
    June 28, 2008

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    An interesting blend of images in a bedroom at dawn. The damp offering over silk and satin, a loving thank you.
    (But I could have got it wrong)
    A subtly beaming entry.
    Marlene