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Heart of the Night

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Moon shimmers down upon a sea of Light,
Shifting sands singing in the Heart of the Night.
I gazed upon a scene and was gripped to my core
The fire blazing surrounded by four.

Sweet sounds slipped from moon-lit throats,
Wind whipped hair abound,
Lit by the light within and without,
The Women circled 'round.

As I stood, water engulfed my feet,
My body swayed to your Heavenly Heart beat.
Wind and wave and fire light,
Paled in my minds Earthly delight.

Time slipped by me as you held your embrace,
And windblown spray covered my face.
Protected deep within your catacombe,
I could feel the tender pain of Life's bloom.

Candles flared high as the Dance progressed,
Deep inside with a healing touch, you blessed.
All around, wind, wave and fire shouted of your life,
Your light speared deep within, soothing my strife.

Divine Mother, Goddess of Light,
To you I come seeking protection from the night.
Come home to shelter within your arm,
Surrounded by Love, hidden from harm.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The stunning background was made by a good friend Bret Joneson. He is an amazing graphics designer and I am truly touched by this wonderful creation for my poem.

Thank you so much Bret

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  • CatQueen248
    10 hours ago
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    The only error I found was "catacombe" catacomb doesn't have and "e" on it. This was truly a wonderful and beautiful poem. I loved the background took. I also really love the background from your home page.


  • Araya Jabari
    2 days ago
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    absoulutly beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! perfect in every way

  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 14
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    Awesome!!

    Stunning piece, love the imagery and emotions. So well portrayed. Superbly penned hunni

  • wow

    great words and comforting as well; I love this you did amazing!!!

  • You did a wonderful job hun.. This was really amazing.. The imagery was vivid and the emotion was just right I really loved this.. You did a wonderful job..


    Angel
  • heartwarming

    so beautiful
    love daydreaming to this
    the feel of it calming the romance surrounds

  • Beautifully done.

    Eloquent words painting excellent imagery. You have succeeded in the art of lining up words to be felt rather than read.

    Fantastic!

    . Rewarded 4

  • this is beautiful keep writing i love it =]
  • It was an enjoyable poem to read, and I really liked ow your rhyme scheme wasn't set in stone, and how it changed around a bit, but always had four line. it reminded me a lot of a Pushkin sonnet, in the sense. There was a lot about your story that could be left up to interpretation, but, generally, it was pretty easy to understand. The only thing I'd change about this poem is the font color; it's a little difficult to see because it sort of blends into your truly beautiful background. Maybe just a green a few shades lighter. But the poem itself was brilliant. ^_^
  • profmes
    July 7

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    GODDESS?

    HEY YER AIN'T YONDER
    MORE
    THAN CHEAP RHYMING
    LET'S BE RESPECTFUL IN
    THE MATTERS OF THEOLOGY.

    BLESS,
    PROF. MES

    . Rewarded 4


  • rollingzen
    July 7
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    well done....squinting......


  • NurseyPoo
    July 7

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    Beautiful

    I enjoyed this very much; your words were beautiful. I did notice that you used AABB in the write except for the second stanza which was ABAB. Just a thought. Nice work

    . Rewarded 4

  • This was so beautiful,truly amazing! Words cannot explain!loved it so much!!! Well done!!

  • Nice rhyming and flow. It is a sweet and tender poem. Great job.


  • azlyn gold member
    July 7

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    Wonderfully written and rhymed. The background is exceptional! Perfect to accompany this precious verse!

    Blessed Be~

    'ssssssssssss

    . Rewarded 4

  • WOW......

    this is seriously beautiful
    i'm in awe at the descriptions in this piece

    kudos on this beautiful write!!!!!!

  • This was awesome.
    Got the link from Bretts Bg inspired off this piece and had to check it out. Am definately glad I did.

    This is great
    Love
    Passions


  • Sanguinarius gold member
    June 22

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    Amazing !!!

    I am not usually a fan on rhymed poetry, but this was astoundingly beautiful my friend. I could feel the words entering my heart transformed into feeling. Most excellent ! ~Bret~


  • Araya Jabari
    June 21
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    It reminds me of a book I read...Book of shadows? Anywho It flows really well
  • GREAT!!

    I love this peice and I'm the third to comment it.. your works have a different kind of energy about them that drag me into the story and I love every single moment of it.. being engulfed by the words you write I really like the last four lines.
    ♥always Katie

  • aww wow this is so beautiful,
    i love this poem so so much hun,
    its beautiful and full of love,
    all my love,
    kitty xxx
  • oh wow this is an amazing write, wish i could write this way and on that topic as well.i find it difficult but its beautifully written well done
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