Dana's eyes sparkled with excitement
A smile stretched across her face
You filled a hole inside her heart
That no one could replace
You were the baby to be born
The seed set to be grown
The joy in Dana's life
So, she wouldn't be alone
The day that you were born
You were gone within a hour
The world around her crashed down
Her spirit padlocked on sour
Depression shut poor Dana in
There was no one to bring her joy
She'll just sit in your new room crying
She lost you, baby boy
Rip Landon Wednesday June 18 2008
Author notes
My cousin Dana lost her baby. It was born without a way to breathe and bowels.
I am wonderful- a contest said to put this in here
A contest entry
- Dark beauty by Maili Knephthan.
600 points, ended July 2, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Gosh this is a really tragic poem...
Its a truley horrific thing to lose a child...and pretty hard to write about - you captured it very well.
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This has broken my heart my daugter died on the way to the hospital she was a 30 week baby and she should of lived I do wish piece for this mother I know the pain all to well and I am sorry that anyone has to go through this ever
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I felt as though you were writing about me almost, my son died after less than 2 hours of life, hardest thing in the world for me
Beautiful poem
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Stay safe
~Manda
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This is very well written. I am so sorry for your family's loss. I can't even imagine what she must have went thru.
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aw, this is so sad. I'm sorry for your cousin's (and your) loss. You did a good job writing this. Keep up your good work. Best of luck.
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this is so sad and eye opening... i dont know what else to say cept that it is beautifu
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My heart aches....I am sorry for the loss. This piece is especially precious as it speaks eloquently about the tragedy of a child passing....our family lost a baby to SIDS, he was barely four month's old so this is something I can directly feel and relate to. Well written and voiced.
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This is most disatrous, indeed. Sorry to hear of her plight lol thanks for your entry
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This is unbelievably good, and also very sad. So sorry that this happened
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This was heartwrenching. It just flowed so perfectly. I loved reading it. It just seemed to fit so perfectly. I like how you basically took your cousins pain and put it in your own words.
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I am so sorry for your cousin's baby. It is very sad indeed. It pulled at my heart. I am only 18, so I don't know what it's like to lost a child. It was very well written too. I'm sorry that this happened
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Dana is 19.
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Awh...I'm so saddened to here this! There are a few cases of those whom do not cherish the gift of a child and take them for granted. That isn't what nature intended. This is. So.. it's a hard thing for those of us to cope with when we know what was lost to us. Touching tender verse.
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This is so sad. I am sorry that your cousin lost her child. It is so hard to lose that one thing in your life that you look forward to. The poem brought back the memories of my two miscarriages. Thank you for sharing and Thank you for putting the "I am Wonderful" in your AN as per the rules. Good luck in my contest
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I am really proud of this poem, that's why I entered it into so many contests. I normally don't do that.
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