Eat my remains to survive
eat my life away to stay alive
everlasting hate burning in your eyes
down on your knees feasting with the flies
taking your hatered out on me
tearing me open so I'll bleed
to the tormenting rip and tear
I only have my scream to bare
now enjoying my silence
you contnue in your rage and violence
virgin blood now dripping from your chin
with my throat ripped out, you bite me again
this time to tear out my heart
sucking the life out until it begins to rot
now digging me open like a large hole
deeper and deeper to find and devour my soul
deeper into my spirit's well
deeper into my tormenting hell
A contest entry
- Fire and Ice by Salig Flicka.
455 points, ended July 27, 2008, 21 entries
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This was, to say the least, extremely powerful. It was cold and hot at the same time. I felt the pain practically dripping from it. I thouroughly enjoyed reading this. Great piece and good luck in the contest.
God Bless,
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this is great wow i liked this alot i couldn't stop reading it
its amazing!!
great job!!
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whoa...My face was like, two inches from the screen I got so pulled in! My mum walked by and was like, "Mylee..what the heck?"
This is so amazing. Scary and dark. I like that
Mylee
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Dark
Young lady your poems are Dracula like and that is not a bad thing. Some of us just are better at the dark writes. Pen on young poet
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'deeper and deeper to find and devour my soul
deeper into my spirit's well
deeper into my tormenting hell'
Wow! really good write. very visual and dark. I like those lines and i like your rhyming scheme. really incredible write and i am happy i came across it to read. inspirational and deep. i can feel the pain and emotion in this poem
good luck in your future writes
all the best
love, peace and chicken greace
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