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The Final Kiss

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You see him there, he’s waiting
just inside the door,
your heart is beating fast now
hesitate no more.

Though nonchalant his manner
and casual his air,
does he pose a threat to you?
Step forward if you dare.

His smile is so beguiling

and pinpoint bright his eyes,
he offers you his welcome hand,
his gaze will hypnotize.

His laughter is infectious
he puts you at your ease,
should you still be worried?
His touch an icy freeze.

I think that you should go now
but maybe it’s too late,
the door has closed behind you.
Now has it sealed your fate?

Life blood slowly slips away,
his hold the grasp of death,
one kiss upon your eager lips
he’ll take your final breath!

 

 

 

 



 

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  • righteousme
    June 29, 2008
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    thank you again...


  • Deaths Desire
    June 19, 2008

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    great
    A passion full write yet so very dark!!!! Loved it
    It describes the disire of the last kiss verry well!!! And also the knowlege of death!!

    fav part?

    You see him there, he’s waiting
    just inside the door,
    your heart is beating fast now
    hesitate no more.

    Though nonchalant his manner
    and casual his air,
    does he pose a threat to you?
    Step forward if you dare.

    His smile is so beguiling

    and pinpoint bright his eyes,
    he offers you his welcome hand,
    his gaze will hypnotize.


  • Zenda-Lokki
    June 19, 2008

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    Rhythmic elegance

    Dark powerful words brought together to make a marvellous poem.

    My favourite part:
    "His laughter is infectious
    he puts you at your ease,
    should you still be worried?
    His touch an icy freeze."

    Great job
    Del


  • HiddenByTheDark
    June 19, 2008

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    Dark and passionate, very good write the energy flows so fast.. it's an act that happens so fast yet so slow


  • breedluv gold member
    June 19, 2008
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    I like Dark Sue!


  • righteousme
    June 19, 2008

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    thank you for your time and talent... the rhyme was distracting for me in this piece... i got the overall message though... it dug in...


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 19, 2008

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    Dark. Brilliant, and the rhyme is superb too. Chilling and threatening this piece is. Wonderful flow to the piece too. Well done Sue. Good luck in the contest.

    With
    Dark
    Wishes
    Wayne Leon

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