I wanted a vacation,
but I think I'll have to pass.
My summer will be boring,
'cause I can't afford the gas.
Each day the price increases --
I can't stand to hear the talk.
I don't know what to do, 'cause
I've forgotten how to walk.
I'm sure that sounds pathetic,
but I need to drive to live.
I'm spoiled, and I'm lazy,
and our country's gotta give!
I worked for countless hours,
now I feel like such a fool.
The gov' takes half my money,
and the rest is spent on fuel.
The price of gas keeps rising,
and I know it's gone too far.
I think it might be cheaper,
if I simply mail my car.
What does this poem mean to you?
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lol,,,, AMEN,,,, you've got a great way of putting short lines together with rhyming that far outshines any I've seen thus far,,, I prefer rhyming myself,,, and the ends seem to really make me giggle,,,thanks again for sharing,,,,gooday
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My sister was the first one to read this and comment, lucky her! Unlike her, I love rhyme, especially your rhyme, and this was a hilarious pleasure all the way through! You made me laugh, too. Thanks!
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Cute but true. Sadly...this flowed very nicely. thank you for your entry into the contest
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So funny, but oh so true! But, I leanred if I dont drive with a lead foot and I accelerate slower, I save more gas! I've stretched one tank to almost 2 weeks when it normally last maybe one. good write
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This is truly a world- wide ecademic. Its getting a bit too out of hand I think. Thanks for sharing xox
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XD. So true. I loved it. Very smooth rhyming with casual use of scarcasm. I'm sure you haven't forgotten how to walk.
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haha! awesome!
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Yup!
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sweet!
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Haha this is awesome. I like the rhyme scheme and it didn't feel forced at all, unlike some poems I've read. Great write and thanks for sharing!
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haha, niiice =]
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This was majorly true and very well written I like it very much and we drive for a living so we know exactly how it is. Sometimes I think it would be cheaper to mail us to where we need to go..
Thank you for sharing
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The rhythm and rhyming are great, and you've taken something that affects a lot of people (so they can relate) and given it a humorous twist. Definitely enjoyed this one!!
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Truthful
It was humorous in a pointed way. If but only we could fill our cars with "gas au natural" eat a burrito dinner and get a full tank? lol little crass humor apologize. All in all, it was a pointedly truthful write and I enjoyed it. ~mandie~ -
AH! I think I see the light of truth. Gas prices are absolutly ridiculous! I think mailing our cars WOULD be cheaper!
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dude it's so true. gas is just getting beyond a joke. i love ho it's based on a true life crisis for everyone, but how you have rymed all of itand incorporaed the humor. excellent!
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Great Write
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whimsical and at the same time to damn true. Nice job!
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there is a positive side to not possessing a driver's liscense at this point and time in history. i only wish the blisters and abscense of skin on a few of my toes would recognize that as well. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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hahaha i like this one...stupid gas prices.
just shows how reliant we are on technology. ive forgotten how to walk...wouldn't surprise me one of these days!
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Hilarious
Perfectly ryhmed. The words just flowed off the screen, I loved every second of reading this poem. So funny. I wish I could write humourous poetry like this.
Great job.
Del
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Way to go Justin! Beautifully rhymed and complete... I see gold in your future! Oh, and did mention it's hilarious?
Ken
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Wow Justin. Nice job.
Methinks you captured the idea of the contest correctly, and I wish you luck. I think my favorite stanza is this one:
"Each day the price increases --
I can't stand to hear the talk.
I don't know what to do, 'cause
I've forgotten how to walk."
Great job on yet another humours peice. Keep penning dear poet!
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Very good rhyming
It's an awesome poem.
And its totally true...lol.
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funny stuff there... once again the rhyme didnt phase me and i made it all the way through... that says something... great piece
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